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Big salary is much more important than job satisfaction. Do you agree or disagree? Provide relevant examples if necessary. v.16

Big salary is much more important than job satisfaction. Provide relevant examples if necessary. v. 16
It is often argued that good wage is important than a satisfying job. I strongly agree with this opinion and I believe, salary is the key and everything else in the job is not a concern. First of all, I would like to earn a big salary to fulfil all my dreams. Having just an enjoyable job without a good pay will never help us to go the places we wanted to visit or buy things we desire. For example, one of my friends who is working as a small clerk in my hometown always has an interest to visit Belgium, even though, he is happy with his job. He is not able to afford to book the hotels and flights to travel because of low-scaled job. So, I always believe a high paid work than opting a satisfactory job with in-sufficient wage. Secondly, with a good income, one can satisfy their family needs and can be more responsible towards them. We cannot imagine when a situation arrives requires a lump sum of money. We have to be ready to face unexpected issues especially if it is related to health emergencies. For example, my grandfather was detected with a rare skin cancer and doctors can be only treated by specialists in London cancer hospitals. Luckily, with the saving's I had, I paid a very large amount of money as a bill for the treatment involves complicated surgical procedures. One definitely cannot afford to pay who has a very less income. To conclude, Although a satisfying job makes one feel happy, It cannot fulfil all the expectations. Better pay will always help to be more confident and provides a healthier chance to take up all the responsibilities often closely coupled with money.
It is
often
argued that
good
wage is
important
than a satisfying
job
. I
strongly
agree
with this opinion and I believe, salary is the key and everything else in the
job
is not a concern.

First of all
, I would like to earn a
big
salary to fulfil all my dreams. Having
just
an enjoyable
job
without a
good
pay will never
help
us to go the places we wanted to visit or
buy
things we desire.
For example
, one of my friends who
is
working as a
small
clerk in my hometown always has an interest to visit Belgium,
even though
, he is happy with his
job
. He is not able to afford to book the hotels and flights to travel
because
of low-scaled
job
.
So
, I always believe a high paid work than opting a satisfactory
job
with in-sufficient wage.

Secondly
, with a
good
income, one can satisfy their family needs and can be more responsible towards them. We cannot imagine when a situation arrives requires a lump sum of money. We
have to
be ready to face unexpected issues
especially
if it
is related
to health emergencies.

For example
, my grandfather
was detected
with a rare skin cancer and doctors can be
only
treated by specialists in London cancer hospitals. Luckily, with the saving's I had, I paid a
very
large amount of money as a bill for the treatment involves complicated surgical procedures. One definitely cannot afford to pay who has a
very
less income.

To conclude
, Although a satisfying
job
makes
one feel happy, It cannot fulfil all the expectations. Better pay will always
help
to be more confident and provides a healthier chance to take up all the responsibilities
often
closely
coupled with money.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes

IELTS essay Big salary is much more important than job satisfaction. Provide relevant examples if necessary. v. 16

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
291 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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Lexical Resource: 6.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 6.0
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