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Being a celebrity - such as famous film star or sports personality - brings problems as well as benefits. Do you think that being a celebrity brings more benefits or more problems? v.10

Being a celebrity - such as famous film star or sports personality - brings problems as well as benefits. Do you think that being a celebrity brings more benefits or more problems? v. 10
Almost every human on planet earth has a dream of being a famous celebrity. One has to follow a punishing routine in order to get success. We will explore pros and cons of being a famous person. The most rewarding outcome of being a celebrity is fame. Fans adore and worship their celebrity like a god. Wherever you go, people recognise you and you get unrestricted access to almost everything at your disposal. Looking at another side of the coin, fame also creates inconveniences. Wherever you go, people recognise you and try to pose with you and get your autograph. As up the ladder of fame you go, less private life you have. Next, the most precious thing is respect. People respect and treat you as a role model. People and press follow actions of you and monitor even slightest move, you make. You can be an inspiration to millions of people, which is an outstanding experience. At the same time, you have to be very cautious with your public and private behaviour. Respect comes with a high sense of responsibility and dignity. Monetary gain is another bright side with achieving success. Successful people earn millions of dollars with each assignment and can get everything, which money can buy. On the darker side, they need to maintain the money wisely so that at the end of career they have sufficient money to live a respectful life. For instance, a famous Indian actress like Saira Bano is currently living in poverty after having a successful career. In conclusion being a famous celebrity has both pros and cons. It is a gift which a few people get out of millions. With a little inconvenience, I think it has more benefits than troubles.
Almost every human on planet earth has a dream of being a
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famous
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celebrity
. One
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has to
follow a punishing routine in order to
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get
success. We will explore pros and cons of being a
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famous
person.

The most rewarding outcome of being a
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celebrity
is fame. Fans adore and worship their
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celebrity
like a god. Wherever you go,
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people
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recognise
you and you
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get
unrestricted access to almost everything at your disposal. Looking at another side of the coin, fame
also
creates inconveniences. Wherever you go,
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people
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recognise
you and try to pose with you and
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get
your autograph. As up the ladder of fame you go, less private life you have.

Next
, the most precious thing is respect.
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People
respect and treat you as a role model.
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People
and press follow actions of you and monitor even slightest
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move
, you
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make
. You can be an inspiration to millions of
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people
, which is an outstanding experience. At the same time, you
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have to
be
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very
cautious with your public and private
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behaviour
. Respect
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comes
with a high sense of responsibility and dignity.

Monetary gain is another bright side with achieving success. Successful
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people
earn millions of dollars with each assignment and can
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get
everything, which money can
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buy
. On the darker side, they need to maintain the money
wisely
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so
that at the
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end
of career they have sufficient money to
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live
a respectful life.
For instance
, a
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famous
Indian actress like
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Saira
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Bano
is
currently
living in poverty after having a successful career.

In conclusion
being a
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famous
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celebrity
has both pros and cons. It is a gift which a few
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people
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
out of millions. With a
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little
inconvenience, I
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think
it has more benefits than troubles.
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15Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Being a celebrity - such as famous film star or sports personality - brings problems as well as benefits. Do you think that being a celebrity brings more benefits or more problems? v. 10

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
290 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
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Task Achievement: 6.0
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