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With the rise in popularity of the internet, newspapers will soon become a thing of the past. v.4

With the rise in popularity of the internet, newspapers will soon become a thing of the past. v. 4
A typical day of a person starts with a newspaper. The newspaper was and still is an important part of a family. Due to the popularity of the internet, the newspaper followers have reduced significantly. It is controversial whether the newspaper will become a history or not. I believe the digital newspaper would replace the printed newspapers in the future. Firstly, let us look at the advantages of using the printed newspapers over the e-newspapers. The feel of the paper will never be replaced by the internet. Moreover, the internet is expensive. A device and the internet connection is required to read the news on the internet. Whereas, for newspapers, someone just needs to buy a subscription. Another limitation on the internet is its coverage whereas newspapers can be used anywhere, for example, garden, beach or in the flight. The digital devices to read newspapers are harmful to the eyes as well. Many people, on the contrary, would agree that the popularity of the e-newspaper is a proof that people are accepting it over printed versions. Digital newspapers are eco-friendly. For instance, the reduction of the newspapers would definitely lower the paper production. Ultimately fewer trees would be chopped down. Another advantage of e-paper is unlimited news access. For example, with the internet, anyone can get up-to-date news. The internet also provides the benefit of various languages where the user can choose the language of his interest. For instance, if members of a family prefer to read the news in different languages, online news portals is their best option. I believe, as the world is moving ahead with technology, we would not be surprised if the printed newspapers become a thing of the past.
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with a
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. The
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was and
still
is an
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important
part of a family. Due to the popularity of the internet, the
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newspaper
followers have
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reduced
significantly
. It is controversial whether the
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newspaper
will become a history or not. I believe the digital
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newspaper
would replace the
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printed
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newspapers
in the future.

Firstly
,
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let
us look at the advantages of using the
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printed
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newspapers
over the e-newspapers. The feel of the paper will never
be replaced
by the internet.
Moreover
, the internet is expensive. A device and the internet connection
is required
to read the
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news
on the internet. Whereas, for
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newspapers
, someone
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just
needs to
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buy
a subscription. Another limitation on the internet is its coverage whereas
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newspapers
can be
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used
anywhere,
for example
, garden, beach or in the flight. The digital devices to read
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newspapers
are harmful to the eyes
as well
.

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people
,
on the contrary
, would
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agree
that the popularity of the e-newspaper is a proof that
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people
are accepting it over
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printed
versions. Digital
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newspapers
are eco-friendly.
For instance
, the reduction of the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
newspapers
would definitely lower the paper production.
Ultimately
fewer trees would
be chopped
down. Another advantage of e-paper
is unlimited
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news
access.
For example
, with the internet, anyone can
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get
up-to-date
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news
. The internet
also
provides the benefit of various languages where the user can choose the language of his interest.
For instance
, if members of a family prefer to read the
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news
in
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different
languages, online
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news
portals is their best option.

I believe, as the world is moving ahead with technology, we would not
be surprised
if the
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printed
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
newspapers
become a thing of the past.
10Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
22Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay With the rise in popularity of the internet, newspapers will soon become a thing of the past. v. 4

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
284 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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