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at universities and colleges, sports are just important as classes and libraries and should receive equal financial support v.1

at universities and colleges, sports are just important as classes and libraries and should receive equal financial support v. 1
It is thought by some that losing of plants and animal species is one of the environmental issues of today's generation while others believe that we are facing more serious environmental problems than that. In my opinion, the loss of particular species of plants and animals is one of the minor issues only, but pollution in water and air is the main problem of our mother Earth at this time. Firstly, we all know that plants and animals have a big part in our environment which is making an ecological balance. For example, plants give us oxygen and purify the air that we breathe and also we can use it for therapeutic purposes as an herbal medical and many more. On the other hand, animals are there to help us for pest and weed control of the environment. Moreover, the government should make a law on how to conserve and protect the remaining species that we have by punishing the offenders like illegal loggers and animal hunters. Another point to consider is the air and water pollution. Because of the rapid population growth, we cannot deny the fact that the main cause of these pollutions is the human being. People are becoming irresponsible in waste management that's why the air and water are too polluted already. For instance, We are throwing garbages everywhere without proper segregation, as a result, flood is everywhere while those garbages are floating on the river and clogging in the drainage system. Aside from that, big factories are polluting the air because of their hazardous fumes and toxic waste materials. To conclude, the loss of some plants and animal species can be easily controlled by the government by imposing laws, but the problem regarding the air and water pollution is a big issue that we cannot solve and becoming worse every day.
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that losing of
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species is one of the environmental issues of
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's generation while others believe that we are facing more serious environmental problems than that. In my opinion, the loss of particular species of
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plants
and
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is one of the minor issues
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in
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is the main problem of our mother Earth at this time.

Firstly
, we all know that
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plants
and
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have a
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part in our environment which is making an ecological balance.
For example
,
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plants
give us oxygen and purify the
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air
that we breathe and
also
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it for therapeutic purposes as
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herbal medical and
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more.
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animals
are there to
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us for pest and weed control of the environment.
Moreover
, the
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should
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a law on how to conserve and protect the remaining species that we have by punishing the offenders like illegal loggers and
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hunters.

Another point to consider is the
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air
and
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water
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pollution
.
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Because
of the rapid population growth, we cannot deny the fact that the main cause of these
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pollutions
is the human being.
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are becoming irresponsible in waste management that's why the
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air
and
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are too polluted already.
For instance
,

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garbages
everywhere without proper segregation,
as a result
, flood is everywhere while those
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garbages
are floating on the river and clogging in the drainage system. Aside from that,
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big
factories are polluting the
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air
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of their hazardous fumes and toxic waste materials.

To conclude
, the loss of
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some
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plants
and
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animal
species can be
easily
controlled by the
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government
by imposing laws,
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but
the problem regarding the
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air
and
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water
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pollution
is a
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big
issue that we cannot solve and becoming worse every day.
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IELTS essay at universities and colleges, sports are just important as classes and libraries and should receive equal financial support v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
306 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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