The population of elderly people in several country is concernedfacing a decrease i total. By the contrast, an increase of young adults is happening in this modern era so that it brings twofold adventages and i think the goverment should offer more education in orther that the youths can bedeveloped faster.
To begin with the role of elders in giving advise and opportunity for the next generation related to survive in this modern life. their struggles that brings benefit to the new kives nowadays. For instance, the veterans who had a combat with the colonizer in order to liberate the coutry. nowadays, even though their powers are less than young people, at least developing an organisation to protect them by the authority in which way to respect their sacrifices.
On one side, firistly higher population of youth generation is a power of country. Moreover, a lot of youngrs having the fresh critical thinking that can improve the social life, not only to their country but even for the world generally. thus, the government should pay more attantion in increasing the fasilities for those modern generation who will be obviously respected in universe entirely. Secondly, young adults is phisically strongger so that it makes them easier to earn money to survive in this days.
To summary, the government should not deny the veterans because they have a huge role for independence of the country to respect their struggles. However the authority either not avoid the potency having by freshmen who are increasing in the middle of population and protect the as well as propiding the advanced fasilities in order that improves their achievements for the country.
The population of elderly
people
in several
country
is
concernedfacing
a decrease
i
total. By the contrast, an increase of young adults is happening in this modern era
so
that it brings twofold
adventages
and
i
think
the
goverment
should offer more education in
orther
that the youths can
bedeveloped
faster.
To
begin
with the role of elders in giving
advise
and opportunity for the
next
generation related to survive in this modern life.
their
struggles that brings benefit to the new
kives
nowadays.
For instance
, the veterans who had a combat with the colonizer in order to liberate the
coutry
.
nowadays
,
even though
their powers are less than young
people
, at least developing an
organisation
to protect them by the authority in which way to respect their sacrifices.
On one side,
firistly
higher population of youth generation is a power of
country
.
Moreover
,
a lot of
youngrs
having the fresh critical thinking that can
improve
the social life, not
only
to their
country
but
even for the world
generally
.
thus
, the
government
should pay more
attantion
in increasing the
fasilities
for those modern generation who will be
obviously
respected in universe
entirely
.
Secondly
, young adults is
phisically
strongger
so
that it
makes
them easier to earn money to survive in
this days
.
To summary, the
government
should not deny the veterans
because
they have a huge role for independence of the
country
to respect their struggles.
However
the authority either not avoid the potency having by freshmen who are increasing in the middle of population and protect the
as well
as
propiding
the advanced
fasilities
in order that
improves
their achievements for the
country
.
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5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
24Mistakes