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At present, the media affects people’s lives significantly. What impact does this have on society? Is it a negative or positive development? v.5

At present, the media affects people’s lives significantly. What impact does this have on society? Is it a negative or positive development? v. 5
Media has a significant impact on the lives of people these days. The main impact on society is that people are buying unnecessary things by being influenced by the media and it is a negative development because people are facing financial problems due to excess spending. The main impact of the media on people’s lives is that the media easily influence people, and they end up buying expensive products that are not necessary. In other words, people watch advertisements for popular brands on TV and in print media and famous celebrities promote them. Therefore, they want to buy those products because they think that it will raise their standard in society. For example, according to a recent survey conducted by the Guardian revealed that 40% of the young people replaced their smartphones with newer models after seeing celebrity endorsement in various magazines and newspapers. It is e negative development because people are getting into debt and due to overspending they are facing financial crises. That is to say that, most people take loans from banks or use credit cards to buy the things that they cannot afford and do not need. As a result, they get into debt and sometimes they are not able to pay that money back that eventually results in the financial crisis. For instance, a report published by the Delhi times in the year 2017 suggested that 45% of the middle-class people in India owe money to the banks because they purchased expensive cars on loans and now facing financial issues. In conclusion, media has affected the society to an extent that people buy products that they are not required and this is a negative development because they are facing financial issues due to overspending.
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people
these days. The main impact on society is that
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people
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by the
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media
and it is a
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negative
development
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because
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people
are facing
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financial
problems due to excess spending.

The main impact of the
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media
on
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people’s
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lives
is that the
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media
easily
influence
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people
, and they
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end
up buying expensive products that are not necessary.
In other words
,
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people
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watch
advertisements for popular brands on TV and in print
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media
and
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famous celebrities
promote them.
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, they want to
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buy
those products
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because
they
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think
that it will raise their standard in society.
For example
, according to a recent survey conducted by the Guardian revealed that 40% of the young
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people
replaced their smartphones with newer models after seeing celebrity endorsement in various magazines and newspapers.

It is e
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negative
development
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because
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people
are getting into debt and due to overspending they are facing
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financial
crises.
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to say that, most
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people
take loans from banks or
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use
credit cards to
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buy
the things that they cannot afford and do not need.
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, they
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get
into debt and
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sometimes
they are not able to pay that money back that
eventually
results in the
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financial
crisis.
For instance
, a report published by the Delhi times in the year 2017 suggested that 45% of the middle-
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class
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people
in India owe money to the banks
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because
they
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purchased
expensive cars on loans and
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now
facing
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financial
issues.

In conclusion
,
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media
has
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affected
the society to an extent that
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people
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buy
products that they are not required and this is a
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negative
development
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because
they are facing
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financial
issues due to overspending.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay At present, the media affects people’s lives significantly. What impact does this have on society? Is it a negative or positive development? v. 5

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
289 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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