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asaPart 31. What do you think make someone a good friend to a whole family? 2. Do you think we meet different kind of friend at different stages of our lives? 3. How easy is it to make friend with people from a different age group? 4. Do you think it is possibl v.1

asaPart 31. What do you think make someone a good friend to a whole family? 2. Do you think we meet different kind of friend at different stages of our lives? 3. How easy is it to make friend with people from a different age group? 4. Do you think it is possibl v. 1
Some environmentalists think that the government ought to focus on global warming rather than regional environmental problems. Although, I agree that global warming is a huge and urgent problem, I think that local problems are crucial as well, so the governments' budget should be spent on tackling both difficulties. Each small environmental problem may cause many serious influences if governments do not prior to take into account. For example, when detrimental human actions, such as littering public places and selling illegal meats, can be prohibited, this can prevent the diversions of viruses spreading to the public, which results in threatening human health. When it comes to solving local issues, it is much easier and more effective to see its results than global warming. Even though the issues are too urgent to be overcome, it takes a much longer time and contribution. However, governments should attach attention to threatening issues as it has already affected our environment. Especially, the weather over the world is gradually much hotter annually and many endangered animals are facing extinction. To overcome these difficulties, governments also arrange a part of the budget to implement green belt to factories, which produce greenhouse gases widespread in the world, in order to slow down the serious change of the weather. In conclusion, I believe governments should allocate a part of its budget on such urgent needs of the environment, I think that regional problems should also be financed equally since they play an important role in humans' lives. -249 words
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small
environmental
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may cause
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many
serious influences if
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governments
do not prior to take into account.
For example
, when detrimental human actions, such as littering public places and selling illegal meats, can
be prohibited
, this can
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prevent
the diversions of viruses spreading to the public, which results in threatening human health. When it
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comes
to solving local issues, it is much easier and more effective to
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see
its results than global warming.
Even though
the issues are too urgent to
be overcome
, it takes a much longer time and contribution.

However
,
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governments
should attach attention to threatening issues as it has already
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affected
our environment.
Especially
, the weather over the world is
gradually
much hotter
annually
and
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many
endangered animals are facing extinction. To overcome these difficulties,
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governments
also
arrange a part of the budget to implement green belt to factories, which produce greenhouse gases widespread in the world, in order to slow down the serious
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change
of the weather.

In conclusion
, I believe
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governments
should allocate a part of its budget on such urgent needs of the environment, I
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think
that regional
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problems
should
also
be financed
equally
since they play an
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important
role in humans'
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lives
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IELTS essay asaPart 31. What do you think make someone a good friend to a whole family? 2. Do you think we meet different kind of friend at different stages of our lives? 3. How easy is it to make friend with people from a different age group? 4. Do you think it is possibl v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
250 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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