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Nuclear energy is great energy sources. Radioactive elements which has big atoms are used as fuel in these systems such as uranium, thorium. Nuclear energy has both advantages and disadvantages. To begin with advantages of nuclear energy, it produces no chemistry or radioactive pollution. This system don't use fossil fuel like oil. Therefore, carbon dioxide emission is decrease in the atmosphere. Moreover, thanks to radioactive element, it can provide great energy capacity. For instance, four reactor can ensure the electricity needs of a country for one year. When it comes to disadvantages of nuclear energy, it is very dangerous for all living and environment. Nuclear energy plants often require control. Otherwise, unexpected error might destroy a lot of things. For example, Chernobly accident caused to destroy people and nature. Further, there is no in there still. In a nutshell, nuclear energy has pros and cons. I suggested that nuclear energy is drawback for humanity. We can prefer other energy sources such as ocean thermal energy, wave energy instead of nuclear energy.
Nuclear
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is great
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sources. Radioactive elements which has
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big
atoms are
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used
as fuel in these systems such as uranium, thorium. Nuclear
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energy
has both advantages and disadvantages. To
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begin
with advantages of nuclear
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energy
, it produces no chemistry or radioactive pollution. This system don't
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use
fossil fuel like oil.
Therefore
, carbon dioxide emission is decrease in the atmosphere.
Moreover
, thanks to radioactive element, it can provide great
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energy
capacity.
For instance
, four
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reactor
can ensure the electricity needs of a country for one year. When it
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comes
to disadvantages of nuclear
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energy
, it is
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very
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dangerous
for all living and environment. Nuclear
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energy
plants
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often
require control.
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, unexpected error might
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destroy
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a lot of
things.
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people
and nature.
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there
still
. In a nutshell, nuclear
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energy
has pros and cons. I suggested that nuclear
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is drawback for humanity. We can prefer other
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energy
sources such as ocean thermal
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energy
, wave
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energy
instead
of nuclear
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.
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IELTS essay Nuclear Energy is advantage or disadvantage

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