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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The movies and TV programs made in one‟s own country are more interesting than the movies and TV programs made in other countries? v.446

The movies and TV programs made in one‟s own country are more interesting than the movies and TV programs made in other countries? v. 446
As technology has progressed and improved our lives, watching movies and TV shows seem to become an indispensable activity in most people’s leisure time. If there were a movie that was made in our country, I would not be thrilled so much because it would not only be composed of things that I am familiar with but also scenes that are ordinary to me. On the other hand, foreign movies or TV programs are always interesting to me. They are telling the stories that we don’t know. The characters, places, and even just tiny objects seem to be so exotic and mysterious to me. We are always so curious about foreigners. We could see people, cultures and natural sceneries so different from our own through foreign movies and TV programs. It is not only our eyes being captured by the colorful iris and hairs of foreign appearance but also the lifestyles they live. For example, I am really fond of a Jimmy Oliver’s cooking TV show. The way he made food and the ingredients he uses are so exotic and fascinating to me. On the other hand, cooking shows from our own TV programs are composed of those dishes and courses that would occur in everyday life, which are a bit of boring to me. Technology is another point that makes foreign movies so interesting. Movie making is an gigantic industry and business in western countries, especially in America. Businessmen would pour huge investments into making movies, and there are also art schools which could cultivate excellent actors, actress and most importantly, the director. Nevertheless, production of a movie is never a major concern in my home country. People used to and despise one who works as artisans because job like this is not so real and necessary to the society. To be honest, I have always been a person that easily get bored with things, and I am not saying that none of the TV programs and movies made in our country is good. After seeing all the normal, unchanged things everyday, I just simply want something new to refresh myself. And foreign movies and TV shows just happen to meet my taste.
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improved
our
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lives
, watching
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movies
and TV
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shows
seem to become an indispensable activity in most
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people
’s leisure time. If there were a
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movie
that
was made
in our
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country
, I would not
be thrilled
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so
much
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because
it would not
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only
be composed
of things that I am familiar with
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but
also
scenes that are ordinary to me.
On the other hand
,
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foreign
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movies
or TV
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programs
are always interesting to me. They are telling the stories that we don’t know. The characters, places, and even
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just
tiny objects seem to be
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so
exotic and mysterious to me.

We are always
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so
curious about foreigners. We could
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see
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people
, cultures and natural sceneries
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so
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different
from our
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own
through
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foreign
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movies
and TV
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programs
. It is not
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only
our eyes
being captured
by the colorful iris and hairs of
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foreign
appearance
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but
also
the lifestyles they
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live
.
For example
, I am
really
fond of a Jimmy Oliver’s cooking TV
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show
. The way he made food and the ingredients he
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uses
are
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so
exotic and fascinating to me.
On the other hand
, cooking
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shows
from our
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own
TV
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programs
are composed
of those dishes and courses that would occur in everyday life, which are a bit of boring to me.

Technology is another point that
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makes
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foreign
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movies
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so
interesting.
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Movie
making is
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an
gigantic industry and business in western
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countries
,
especially
in America. Businessmen would pour huge investments into making
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movies
, and there are
also
art schools which could cultivate excellent actors, actress and most
importantly
, the director.
Nevertheless
, production of a
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movie
is never a major concern in my home
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country
.
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People
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used
to and despise one who works as artisans
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because
job like this is not
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so
real and necessary to the society.

To be honest, I have always been a person that
easily
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get
bored with things, and I am not saying that none of the TV
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programs
and
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movies
made in our
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country
is
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good
. After seeing all the normal, unchanged things
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everyday
, I
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just
simply
want something new to refresh myself. And
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foreign
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movies
and TV
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shows
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just
happen to
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meet
my taste.
10Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
27Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes
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IELTS essay The movies and TV programs made in one‟s own country are more interesting than the movies and TV programs made in other countries? v. 446

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
364 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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