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As most people spend a major part of their adult life at work, job satisfaction is an important element of individual well-being. v.42

As most people spend a major part of their adult life at work, job satisfaction is an important element of individual well-being. v. 42
Majority while away at work, spend a great deal of time of their lives that it is important how they feel about their jobs and how much satisfied they really are. Job satisfaction from their employment is the most valuable factor for their personal gain and to spend time at offices. Job satisfaction depends on personal favour for the job and background of the working place. However, all employees can't expect satisfied jobs always. Firstly, every person prefers to do an occupation for his own anticipation. However, they hope that job will satisfy and aid them to gain their lives successfully. For example, if someone loves dancing, singing, art or sports, they should find their career according to their favour. If they fix upon other professions, they could not be satisfied to their jobs and the will become bored to continue it. Employment plays an influential role in adult life because personal and family expenditure runs through the occupation. In addition, the environment of the office is another important factor for job satisfaction and it rests on the employer and other office staff. For instance, if an employer is unable to co-operate with employees and more rigid rules and regulations adapt to the company, then workers will dislike working there. Furthermore, office staff should be warm-hearted persons and give the helping hands to each of other. Thus, an employer should take care of his workers and these types of factors create better satisfaction on job surrounding. To conclude, expecting a job for content is much difficult nowadays and because of that everyone has to prepare themselves for any job for job satisfaction.
Majority while away at work, spend a great deal of time of their
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lives
that it is
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important
how they feel about their
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jobs
and how much satisfied they
really
are.

Job
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satisfaction
from their employment is the most valuable factor for their personal gain and to spend time at
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offices
.
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Job
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satisfaction
depends on personal
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favour
for the
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job
and background of the working place.
However
, all employees can't
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expect
satisfied
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jobs
always.

Firstly
, every person prefers to do an occupation for his
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own
anticipation.
However
, they hope that
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job
will satisfy and aid them to gain their
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
lives
successfully
.
For example
, if someone
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
loves
dancing, singing, art or sports, they should find their career according to their
Possible spelling mistake. 'favour' is British English.
favour
. If they
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fix
upon other professions, they could not
be satisfied
to their
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jobs
and
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the
will become bored to continue it. Employment plays an influential role in adult life
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because
personal and family expenditure runs through the occupation.

In addition
, the environment of the
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office
is another
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important
factor for
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job
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satisfaction
and it rests on the employer and other
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
office
staff.
For instance
, if an employer is unable to co-operate with employees and more rigid
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
rules
and regulations adapt to the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
company
, then workers will dislike working there.
Furthermore
,
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office
staff should be warm-hearted persons and give the helping hands to each of other.
Thus
, an employer should take care of his workers and these types of factors create better
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satisfaction
on
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job
surrounding.

To conclude
, expecting a
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job
for content is much difficult nowadays and
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because
of that everyone
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has to
prepare themselves for any
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job
for
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job
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
satisfaction
.
10Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
20Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes

IELTS essay As most people spend a major part of their adult life at work, job satisfaction is an important element of individual well-being. v. 42

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
272 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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