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As most people spend a major part of their adult life at work, job satisfaction is an important element of individual well-being. v.36

As most people spend a major part of their adult life at work, job satisfaction is an important element of individual well-being. v. 36
It is believed most of the adults’ lives are spent in their workplace, therefore many people think that job satisfaction is an essential matter for them. There are various factors that affect job satisfaction and the following essay will discuss in details about some of the factors, and whether that the factors are realistic or not. There are some points that influence job satisfaction. Firstly, many employees believe that they are satisfied with their careers since the tasks are in accordance with their passions. They think that the work that they are currently doing is aligned with their talents and they are performing well. Secondly, some employees believe that they would be satisfied with their jobs if they are paid with the expected compensation and benefits. They are being realistic that salary is also a trigger to their work performance. And lastly but not least, a lot of people believe that conductive working environment would also affect the job satisfaction. Some people are idealistic persons and they are willing to work hard in the task that is in accordance with their talent. This kind of thought is realistic since working is not just being paid, but it should also be meaningful and satisfying. As for the compensation and benefit, it is a fact that human kinds are never satisfied with their salary and total earnings. The idea that employees would be satisfied with their jobs if they are paid high is just not realistic. Salary would only satisfy them for a certain amount of time and after that, they will ask for more. And as for the conductive working environment, it would be difficult to find the ideal environment. Every workplace has its owned unique culture and style; therefore the workers should adapt and adjust themselves to the working environment. In conclusion, it is true that adults are spending a lot of their time at work, therefore jobs satisfaction is an important thing. There are several factors that contribute to job satisfaction, but some are realistic while others are just not.
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people
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job
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satisfaction
is an essential matter for them. There are various
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factors
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job
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satisfaction
and the following essay will discuss in
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details
about
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some of the
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factors
, and whether that the
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factors
are
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realistic
or not.

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some
points that influence
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job
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satisfaction
.
Firstly
,
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many
employees believe that they are
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satisfied
with their careers since the tasks are in accordance with their passions. They
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think
that the
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work
that they are
currently
doing
is aligned
with their
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talents and
they are performing well.
Secondly
,
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some
employees believe that they would be
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satisfied
with their
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jobs
if they
are paid
with the
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expected
compensation and benefits. They are being
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realistic
that salary is
also
a trigger to their
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work
performance. And
lastly
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a lot of
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people
believe that conductive
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working
environment would
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affect the
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job
satisfaction.

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people
are idealistic
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persons and
they are willing to
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work
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hard
in the task
that is
in accordance with their talent. This kind of
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thought
is
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since
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working
is not
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just
being paid
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it should
also
be meaningful and satisfying. As for the compensation and benefit, it is a fact that human kinds are never
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satisfied
with their salary and total earnings. The
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idea
that employees would be
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satisfied
with their
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jobs
if they
are paid
high is
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just
not
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realistic
. Salary would
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only
satisfy them for a certain amount of time and after that, they will
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ask for
more. And as for the conductive
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working
environment, it would be difficult to find the ideal environment. Every workplace has its
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owned
unique culture and style;
therefore
the workers should adapt and adjust themselves to the
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working
environment.

In conclusion
, it is true that adults are spending
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a lot of
their time at
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work
,
therefore
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jobs
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satisfaction
is an
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important
thing. There are several
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factors
that contribute to
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job
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satisfaction
,
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but
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some
are
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realistic
while others are
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just
not.
14Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
34Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes

IELTS essay As most people spend a major part of their adult life at work, job satisfaction is an important element of individual well-being. v. 36

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
341 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
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  • Fully explain these ideas
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