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As housing is a basic need for people, government should provide free housing for everyone who cant't afford it, To what extend do you agree or disagree? v.1

As housing is a basic need for people, government should provide free housing for everyone who cant't afford it, v. 1
Nowadays, the cost of homes is increasing at an alarming rate. The apartments are a basic necessity for individuals, the country's officials should give free accommodation, for each and everyone who cannot bear it. This essay will argue, why the higher authorities should grant a free place to stay for people who can't afford it. To begin with, the government collects taxes from the citizens of the country. The responsibility lies in officials to look after the people of the country, and make sure that nobody is left homeless. They should build new buildings to accommodate people who cannot buy such expensive properties. For example, a survey report submitted by the India times states that in Hyderabad the new government have constructed various lofty buildings in different places for those whose earning is below 50, 000 yearly. In this way, the regime can prove to be a valuable asset to the public in need of such homes. In contrast, both men and women, irrespective of their caste, religion give votes to the authority of the nation, believing that they will do something better for them, and provide them with employment, better standards of living etc. A People belonging to the poverty section, hope that the ruling judiciary will benefit them, and their children, such as giving their little ones free education and a spacious flat for them to live in given to them under a provisioned scheme by the ministry of the republic. For instance, a report submitted by the Chinese newspaper states that the ruling party in China has allotted 80 3bhk flats to the poor people including with all amenities under a family scheme. Other kingdoms should also follow China and implement this law to make a better place for underprivileged communities as a whole. To conclude, this essay argued why the low-paid tribes should be given personal housing along with other virtues who cannot buy these modern lavish homes to dwell in. According to my judgement, underpaid people should be given housing boards by the executives of the land who require a proper place of residence.
Nowadays, the cost of homes is increasing at an alarming rate. The apartments are a basic necessity for individuals, the country's officials should give free accommodation, for each and
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everyone
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who
cannot bear it. This essay will argue, why the higher authorities should grant a free
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place
to stay for
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people
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who
can't afford it.

To
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begin
with, the
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government
collects taxes from the citizens of the country. The responsibility lies in officials to look after the
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people
of the country, and
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make
sure that nobody is
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left
homeless. They should build new buildings to accommodate
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people
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
who
cannot
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buy
such expensive properties.
For example
, a survey report submitted by the India times states that in Hyderabad the new
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
have constructed various lofty buildings in
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different
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
places
for those whose earning is below 50, 000 yearly. In this way, the regime can prove to be a valuable asset to the public in need of such homes.

In contrast
, both
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
men
and women, irrespective of their caste, religion give votes to the authority of the nation, believing that they will do something better for them, and provide them with employment, better standards of living etc. A
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
People
belonging to the poverty section, hope that the ruling judiciary will benefit them, and their children, such as giving their
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
little
ones free education and a spacious flat for them to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
live
in
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
given
to them under a provisioned scheme by the ministry of the republic.
For instance
, a report submitted by the Chinese newspaper states that the ruling party in China has allotted 80 3bhk flats to the poor
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
including with all amenities under a family scheme. Other kingdoms should
also
follow China and implement this law to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
a better
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
place
for underprivileged communities as a whole.

To conclude
, this essay argued why the low-paid tribes should be
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
given
personal housing along with other virtues
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
who
cannot
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
buy
these modern lavish homes to dwell in. According to my judgement, underpaid
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
should be
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
given
housing boards by the executives of the land
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
who
require a proper
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
place
of residence.
8.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8.5Mistakes

IELTS essay As housing is a basic need for people, government should provide free housing for everyone who cant't afford it, v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
349 words
8.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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