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Home is the basic necessity of everyone. A government should provide home to those who cannot afford it. v.1

Home is the basic necessity of everyone. A government should provide home to those who cannot afford it. v. 1
While many people have abundant luxuries, others suffer from unimaginable poverty and lack the basic human needs like food and shelter. Home is one of the five most fundamental needs for every human and government of a country should try in every way possible to make sure that there is no homeless in the country. From the very ancient time till today, people’s need for a safe place to live in is considered to be a very fundamental need. This is how the concept of home has emerged and only homeless people can understand the sufferings of not having a shelter. Poor people who cannot manage a decent meal every day often live under the open sky. This is inhuman and the government of a country has a natural obligation to ensure the living places for people. When a government has the responsibility to ensure economic development, infrastructure development, education, roads and highway, protecting people from criminals why providing such a basic need like home for homeless people is in a debate? A huge amount of money spent on research every year and what good those research could bring to the citizens of a country when there are large numbers of people who are living without any shelter? Natural calamities like flood, tsunami and earthquake make many people homeless and the national and international supports then should always keep the shelter in priority for such victims. War is still a curse in the world we live in and because of that a great number of people are forced to leave their houses and become homeless. Should not rich nations, the government of the country and capable individuals raise their helping hands to ensure the shelter of homeless people? The answer is always yes. That’s what makes us human. When we live in a luxurious building, many others are sleeping beside the pavement. Should not a government be considered a failure when they would spend millions of dollars for space research while there would be thousands of people homeless in the country? Homeless people would unsurprisingly get involved in crimes and the society would face more trouble controlling them. So from this perspective, a government should focus on ensuring homes for every family. In fact, the loan, mortgage and subsidiary system we notice in many developed countries like the UK and the USA are aimed to help people to have their own home. To conclude, a living place is one of the most basic needs of every human being and the government of a country should always take initiatives to make sure that there are no homeless people in the country.
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have abundant luxuries, others suffer from unimaginable poverty and lack the basic
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human
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needs
like food and
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shelter
. Home is one of the five most fundamental
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needs
for every
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human
and
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government
of a
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country
should try in every way possible to
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make
sure that there is no
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homeless
in the country.

From the
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,
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need
for a safe place to
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live
in
is considered
to be a
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fundamental
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need
. This is how the concept of home has emerged and
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only
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homeless
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people
can understand the sufferings of not having a
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shelter
. Poor
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people
who cannot manage a decent meal every day
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often
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live
under the open sky. This is inhuman and the
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government
of a
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country
has a natural obligation to ensure the living places for
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people
. When a
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government
has the responsibility to ensure economic development, infrastructure development, education, roads and highway, protecting
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people
from criminals why providing such a basic
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need
like home for
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homeless
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people
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is
in a debate? A huge amount of money spent on research every year and what
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good
those research could bring to the citizens of a
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country
when there are large numbers of
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people
who are living without any shelter?

Natural calamities like flood, tsunami and earthquake
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make
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many
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people
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homeless
and the national and international supports then should always
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keep
the
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shelter
in priority for such victims. War is
still
a curse in the world we
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live
in and
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because
of that a great number of
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people
are forced
to
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leave
their
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houses
and become
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homeless
. Should not rich nations, the
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government
of the
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country
and capable individuals raise their helping hands to ensure the
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shelter
of
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homeless
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people
? The answer is always yes. That’s what
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us
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. When we
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in a luxurious building,
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others are sleeping beside the pavement. Should not a
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government
be considered
a failure when they would spend millions of dollars for space research while there would be thousands of
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people
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homeless
in the country?

Homeless
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would
unsurprisingly
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involved in crimes and the society would face more trouble controlling them.
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So
from this perspective, a
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government
should focus on ensuring
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homes
for every family. In fact, the loan, mortgage and subsidiary system we notice in
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many
developed
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countries
like the UK and the USA
are aimed
to
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help
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people
to have their
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own
home.

To conclude
, a living place is one of the most basic
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needs
of every
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human
being and the
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government
of a
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country
should always take initiatives to
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make
sure that there are no
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homeless
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people
in the
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country
.
3Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
60Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes

IELTS essay Home is the basic necessity of everyone. A government should provide home to those who cannot afford it. v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
440 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 6.0
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