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As early as the twelfth century A. D. , the settlements of Chaco Canyon in New Mexico in the American Southwest were notable for their "great houses, " massive stone buildings that contain hundreds of rooms and often stand three or four stories hig v.2

As early as the twelfth century A. D. , the settlements of Chaco Canyon in New Mexico in the American Southwest were notable for their "great houses, " massive stone buildings that contain hundreds of rooms and often stand three or four stories hig v. 2
Some people have a tendency to become vegetarian as it is better for the human body. Although I agree that a vegetarian diet is healthier, I do not believe that everyone should stop eating meat in order to have good health. There are many reasons why becoming a vegetarian is beneficial. Firstly, science has proven that people who are vegetarians tend to be lower risks of several chronic illnesses such as heart diseases, high blood pressure or obesity. This is because of a healthy vegetarian diet which is low in fat and high in fibre. Secondly, people who do not eat meat protect the environment and resources. Our planet is heating up as the global warming. By replacing meat with vegetarian sources of protein, (nuts, seeds, beans, for example), we can reduce carbon and other greenhouse gas emissions. However, there are some disadvantages to take into consideration before becoming a vegetarian. If a vegetarian’s daily meals are not balanced, he or she might suffer from a lack of calories to meet his or her energy needs. This would make a sense of tiredness or unjustified anger and consequently, they are unable to do anything energetic. In addition, vegetarians often have a harder time than meat eaters as there is not so much choice in restaurants or canteens. Therefore, they have to cook at home by themselves, which is believed that a waste of time or money. In conclusion, although healthy, a vegetarian diet is not for everyone and it requires to be careful in the choice of food and preparation of meals.
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Some
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people
have a tendency to become vegetarian as it is better for the human body. Although I
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agree
that a vegetarian diet is healthier, I do not believe that everyone should
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stop
eating
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meat
in order to have
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good
health.

There are
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many
reasons why becoming a vegetarian is beneficial.
Firstly
, science has proven that
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people
who are vegetarians tend to be lower
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risks
of several chronic illnesses such as heart diseases, high blood pressure or obesity. This is
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because
of a healthy vegetarian diet which is low in
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fat
and high in
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fibre
.
Secondly
,
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people
who do not eat
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meat
protect the environment and resources. Our planet is heating up as the global warming. By replacing
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
meat
with vegetarian sources of protein, (nuts, seeds, beans,
for example
), we can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
reduce
carbon and other greenhouse gas emissions.

However
, there are
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some
disadvantages to take into consideration
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before
becoming a vegetarian. If a vegetarian’s daily meals are not balanced, he or she might suffer from a lack of calories to
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meet
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his or her
energy needs. This would
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make
a sense of tiredness or unjustified anger and
consequently
, they are unable to do anything energetic.
In addition
, vegetarians
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often
have a harder time than
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meat
eaters as there is not
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so
much choice in restaurants or canteens.
Therefore
, they
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have to
cook at home by themselves, which
is believed
that a waste of time or money.

In conclusion
, although healthy, a vegetarian diet is not for everyone and it requires to be careful in the choice of food and preparation of meals.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay As early as the twelfth century A. D. , the settlements of Chaco Canyon in New Mexico in the American Southwest were notable for their "great houses, " massive stone buildings that contain hundreds of rooms and often stand three or four stories hig v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
262 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
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    Present relevant ideas
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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