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As countries have developed there has been a trend towards smaller family sizes. Why does this happen? How does this affect society? v.2

As countries have developed there has been a trend towards smaller family sizes. Why does this happen? How does this affect society? v. 2
According to the current scenario countries are becoming richer in terms of wealth along with development and in the case of family sizes, they are being reduced as the country develops. The major reason behind the cut-offs in the size of family could be the developing mentality of people. Nowadays people especially women are getting busier and more involved in their work as a result, they prefer to have a single child as it has its own benefits. Also, some people cannot afford to have more than one or two children as the cost of educating them would be expensive. Thus, these may be the reasons behind the reduction in family sizes. Considering the impact of the same on society. It has both positive and negative impact on society. Focusing on the positive effects, the reduction in the number of children in particular family will make parents educate the child more are they can afford it for one or two children also it is beneficial for government as less resources will be required due to lower population. On the contrary the negative effect will be on the future of the country as it will have less people compared to previous centuries to take the country on its epitome. In conclusion, family sizes have fallen in countries due to birth control and education, and this has both positive and negative impacts on the society. Regardless of any impacts, this trend is likely to continue as countries around the world develop and become wealthier.
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are becoming richer in terms of wealth along with development and in the case of
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family
sizes, they are being
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reduced
as the
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develops.

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family
could be the developing mentality of
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. Nowadays
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people
especially
women are getting busier and more involved in their work
as a result
, they prefer to have a single child as it has its
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own
benefits.
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cannot afford to have more than one or two children as the cost of educating them would be expensive.
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sizes.

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of the same on society. It has both
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and
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on society. Focusing on the
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effects, the reduction in the number of children
in particular
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family
will
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parents educate the child more are they can afford it for one or two children
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as less resources will
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effect will be on the future of the
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as it will have
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less
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people
compared to previous centuries to take the
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country
on its epitome.

In conclusion
,
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sizes have fallen in
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countries
due to birth control and education, and this has both
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positive
and
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negative
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impacts
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, this trend is likely to continue as
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countries
around the world develop and become wealthier.
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IELTS essay As countries have developed there has been a trend towards smaller family sizes. Why does this happen? How does this affect society? v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
252 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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