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Recent research has confirmed that human activity has become the greatest threat to plant and animal life Why do you think this has happened? How can we reduce our impact on the natural world? v.1

Recent research has confirmed that human activity has become the greatest threat to plant and animal life Why do you think this has happened? How can we reduce our impact on the natural world? v. 1
In the recent research, It has been proven that human activities create major problems to plant and animal life. This essay will first suggest that one of the problems caused by people was construction of industries in forest area and amend regulation law as the most viable solution. The essay further discusses the problems and solutions associated with that. The foremost problem caused by industrialisation leads to deforestation (cutting of trees and air pollution). Most of the animals in the forest depend on fruits and water for their livelihood and shelter purpose. For Example, In the India, The biggest Sahara forest in which around thousand of animals and national animal is lived, now due to constructing industries and export of wood to foreign countries increasing which largely disturbed the animal's life cycle. Some Industries built their created water pollution, thus in turn animals drink polluted water and after that, numbers are decreased rapidly. Currently, only a few animals are there currently. A possible solution to this problem would be to amend the forest law. The law should create regulation in constructing industries, factories, homes in dense areas. Also, creating awareness to the common people about the importance of animals and plants for human survival. Introducing awareness programs help to understand humans about deforestation drawbacks. The Law helps to control forest areas. To conclude, Cutting the forest trees by peoples for introducing new factories and industries makes animal livelihood in danger. Hence, Amendment of law helps to overcome this which was implemented successfully in other developed countries.
In the recent research, It has
been proven
that human activities create major
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problems
to plant and
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animal
life. This essay will
first
suggest that one of the
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problems
caused by
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people
was construction of
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industries
in
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forest
area and amend regulation
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law
as the most viable solution. The essay
further
discusses the
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problems
and solutions associated with that.

The foremost
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problem
caused by
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industrialisation
leads to deforestation (cutting of trees and air pollution). Most of the
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animals
in the
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forest
depend on fruits and water for their livelihood and shelter purpose.
For Example
, In the India, The biggest Sahara
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forest
in which around thousand of
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animals
and national
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animal
is
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lived
,
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now
due to constructing
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industries
and export of wood to foreign countries increasing which
largely
disturbed the animal's life cycle.
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Some
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Industries
built their created water pollution,
thus
in turn
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animals
drink polluted water and after that, numbers
are decreased
rapidly
.
Currently
,
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only
a few
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animals
are there
currently
.

A possible solution to this
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problem
would be to amend the
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forest
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law
. The
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law
should create regulation in constructing
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industries
, factories, homes in dense areas.
Also
, creating awareness to the common
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people
about the importance of
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animals
and plants for human survival. Introducing awareness programs
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help
to understand humans about deforestation drawbacks. The
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Law
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helps
to control
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forest
areas.

To conclude
, Cutting the
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forest
trees by peoples for introducing new factories and
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industries
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makes
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animal
livelihood in
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danger
.
Hence
, Amendment of
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law
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helps
to overcome this which
was implemented
successfully
in other
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developed countries
.
10Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
29Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes
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IELTS essay Recent research has confirmed that human activity has become the greatest threat to plant and animal life Why do you think this has happened? How can we reduce our impact on the natural world? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
256 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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