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Artists need a certain amount of freedom to develop their creativity. Some people think that artists should have total freedom to express any thoughts and ideas. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.17

Artists need a certain amount of freedom to develop their creativity. Some people think that artists should have total freedom to express any thoughts and ideas. v. 17
Art is the externalization of the skills of an artist. Therefore, there are the people who are in the favor to impart full liberty to the artists; however, others oppose this opinion freely. In my opinion, freedom is necessary up to greater extent but there should be proper surveillance on their work to avoid any unpleasant situation. To begin with, there are many reasons why some people are in favor to give full freedom to artists. First of all, if they are free from any suppression that helps them to unveil all the social issues of the society without any fear. They expose the cancerous spot and request the society to uproot that. Any type of confinement will not let them to express their thoughts. Secondly, these creative artists are the nerve of every nation because of their extraordinary skills; if they work freely they, undoubtedly, have the potential to make masterpiece that brings recognition for every country in the map of world. However, I feel that the full autonomy may have adverse effect on the individual and on the society because many times artists are seen painting any objectionable picture, adding any anti-social dialogue in the films that result in the communal riots and hurt sentiments of the people. These types of acts cost the life of the people. For example, once in the a popular film, some Hindu gods are shown begging. This film has not only brought criticism by the hindu society but also sparked communal riots that have ended up in the demise of some people. Therefore, they should not be given full freedom. To sum up, although artists are required to give full liberty for exploring their creativity yet government should ensure that that very act may not hurt others feeling.
Art is the externalization of the
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skills
of an
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artist
.
Therefore
, there are the
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people
who are in the favor to impart
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full
liberty to the
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artists
;
however
, others oppose this opinion
freely
. In my opinion, freedom is necessary up to greater extent
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but
there should be proper surveillance on their work to avoid any unpleasant situation.

To
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begin
with, there are
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many
reasons why
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some
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people
are in favor to give
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full
freedom to
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artists
.
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First of all
, if they are free from any suppression that
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helps
them to unveil all the social issues of the
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society
without any fear. They expose the cancerous spot and request the
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society
to uproot that. Any type of confinement will not
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let
them to express their thoughts.
Secondly
, these creative
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artists
are the nerve of every nation
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because
of their extraordinary
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skills
; if they work
freely
they,
undoubtedly
, have the potential to
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make
masterpiece that brings recognition for every country in the map of world.

However
, I feel that the
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full
autonomy may have adverse effect on the individual and on the
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society
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because
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many
times
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artists
are
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seen
painting any objectionable picture, adding any anti-social dialogue in the films that result in the communal riots and hurt sentiments of the
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people
. These types of acts cost the life of the
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people
.
For example
, once in
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the a
popular film,
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some
Hindu gods
are shown
begging. This film has not
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only
brought criticism by the
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hindu
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society
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but
also
sparked communal riots that have ended up in the demise of
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some
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people
.
Therefore
, they should not be
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given
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full
freedom.

To sum up, although
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artists
are required
to give
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full
liberty for exploring their creativity
yet
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government
should ensure that that
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very
act may not hurt others feeling.
14Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
20Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes

IELTS essay Artists need a certain amount of freedom to develop their creativity. Some people think that artists should have total freedom to express any thoughts and ideas. v. 17

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
296 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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