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Are there any famous buildings in your home town? (what are they? )In what type of building do most people in your home town live? Should buildings be attractive to look at? (why/why not? )What is the most unusual building you have ever seen (why? ) v.1

Are there any famous buildings in your home town? (what are they? )In what type of building do most people in your home town live? Should buildings be attractive to look at? (why/why not? )What is the most unusual building you have ever seen (why? ) v. 1
Migration into cities from the rural areas to find employment or good education become more common among youngsters. There are some reasons behind this phenomena and I certainly opposed the idea that advantages are more than disadvantages of this trend. To begin with, there are several compelling reasons why multiple individuals migrating to urban regions. First and foremost is the availability of jobs. In metropolitan cities, there are a plethora of workplaces where they can join, similarly due to good wages, they settled their life easier in the cities. Furthermore, many reputed institutes and colleges are only stated in cities and every parent want to give standardised education to their young ones, so they send their children to cities for study purposes, likewise, because of good transportation facilities, it is easy to go to the workplace or schools as well. Hence, it is also a major reason for the emigration of people. Undoubtedly, increasing movement of people to the cities has numerous repercussions, due to overpopulation, sources are getting scarce, mainly food sources and land availability. Due to this, many people are unable to food and shelter there. Similarly, the rush of labour in the metropolitan sectors pavé a way to decrease work opportunities for the residents, not only this, but pollution is also intensifying due to high populous. Ergo, there are plenty of problems causing by this movement of people as well as for the environment. As an instance, Delhi is the prominent attraction for workforce and students so it is the most populated city and according to recent figures, it is an extensively dusty city in India. To conclude, ample reasons are there for the migration of people from the countryside area and no doubt that it has numbers of drawback. Facilities should be introduced by the government in rural areas for employment and education to avoid this increasing trend.
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from the rural areas to find employment or
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education become more common among youngsters. There are
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some
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reasons
behind
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phenomena and I
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opposed the
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idea
that advantages are more than disadvantages of this trend.

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begin
with, there are several compelling
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why multiple individuals migrating to urban regions.
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and foremost is the availability of jobs. In metropolitan
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cities
, there are a plethora of workplaces where they can
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join
,
similarly
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due
to
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good
wages, they settled their life easier in the
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cities
.
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many
reputed institutes and colleges are
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stated in
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cities
and every parent want to give
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standardised
education to their young ones,
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so
they
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their children to
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cities
for study purposes,
likewise
,
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of
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transportation facilities, it is easy to go to the workplace or schools
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.
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reason
for the emigration of
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people
.

Undoubtedly
, increasing movement of
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people
to the
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cities
has numerous repercussions,
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due
to overpopulation, sources are getting scarce,
mainly
food sources and land availability.
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Due
to this,
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many
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people
are unable to food and shelter there.
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, the rush of
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labour
in the metropolitan sectors
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pavé
a way to decrease work opportunities for the residents, not
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only
this,
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pollution is
also
intensifying
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due
to high populous. Ergo, there are
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plenty
of problems causing by this movement of
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people
as well
as for the environment. As an instance, Delhi is the prominent attraction for workforce and students
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so
it is the most populated city and according to recent figures, it is an
extensively
dusty city in India.

To conclude
, ample
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reasons
are there for the migration of
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people
from the countryside area and no doubt that it has numbers of drawback. Facilities should
be introduced
by the
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government
in rural areas for employment and education to avoid this increasing trend.
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IELTS essay Are there any famous buildings in your home town? (what are they? )In what type of building do most people in your home town live? Should buildings be attractive to look at? (why/why not? )What is the most unusual building you have ever seen (why? ) v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
312 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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