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(Apply the Ref NO: 2009031403 in speaking title, so users can understand which topic you are talking about) v.1

(Apply the Ref NO: 2009031403 in speaking title, so users can understand which topic you are talking about) v. 1
As more shows and movies are now able to allow us to gain an insight into different cultures and customs, some might claim that we can understand more about many other countries simply by watching it on TV. Personally, I partly agree with this assertion, while such films could be helpful in some cases, there is a range of unexplored ways of life that could never be seen on any television programs. From my viewpoint, I can understand why some people point to the view that television programs and films is a vital source of information about another country. In today’s fast-growing world, the majority of nations and regions all want to introduce their various lifestyles and traditions to the whole world in order to develop the tourist industry and generate more revenue from it. As a result, hundreds of reality shows and documentaries about a specific community or region are broadcast on a regular basis, which hopefully catches the attention of as many international tourists as possible. For instance, I have learned about Carnival festivals which are celebrated annually in South American countries thanks to lots of televised programs. However, I believe that no matter how many shows we watch on TV, there are diverse lifestyles and customs of other communities that human beings are still clueless about, ranging from hunting methods of many indigenous tribes living in the Amazon to the ancient traditions and untouched landscapes of the Altai Mountains in Russia. Due to the uninhabitable environment, such places remain unaffected from the rest of the planet, which means that an average viewer will never be able to know anything about those remote areas. On the other hand, avid travelers in these cases can obtain a better understanding of the far-flung destinations where they are going to explore or study. For example, by visiting a fishing village in Greenland, I could understand the whole process of trapping king crabs, the primary source of food for the locals, which hasn’t been on-air until today. In conclusion, it seems to me that television can help us all to know about distinct areas and regions on Earth, but there are still undiscovered secrets that haven’t been published on this important public service.
As more
shows
and movies are
now
able to
allow
us to gain an insight into
different
cultures and customs,
some
might claim that we can understand more about
many
other countries
simply
by watching it on TV.
Personally
, I partly
agree
with this assertion, while such films could be helpful in
some
cases, there is a range of unexplored ways of life that could never be
seen
on any television programs.

From my viewpoint, I can understand why
some
people
point to the view that television programs and films is a vital source of information about another country. In
today
’s
fast
-growing world, the majority of nations and regions all want to introduce their various lifestyles and traditions to the whole world in order to develop the tourist industry and generate more revenue from it.
As a result
, hundreds of reality
shows
and documentaries about a specific community or region are broadcast on a regular basis, which
hopefully
catches the attention of as
many
international tourists as possible.
For instance
, I have learned about Carnival festivals which
are celebrated
annually
in South American countries thanks to lots of televised programs.

However
, I believe that no matter how
many
shows
we
watch
on TV, there are diverse lifestyles and customs of other communities that human beings are
still
clueless about, ranging from hunting methods of
many
indigenous tribes living in the Amazon to the ancient traditions and untouched landscapes of the Altai Mountains in Russia. Due to the uninhabitable environment, such places remain unaffected from the rest of the planet, which means that an average viewer will never be able to know anything about those remote areas.
On the other hand
, avid travelers in these cases can obtain a better understanding of the far-flung destinations where they are going to explore or study.
For example
, by visiting a fishing village in Greenland, I could understand the whole process of trapping king crabs, the primary source of food for the locals, which hasn’t been on-air until
today
.

In conclusion
, it seems to me that television can
help
us all to know about distinct areas and regions on Earth,
but
there are
still
undiscovered secrets that haven’t
been published
on this
important
public service.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS essay (Apply the Ref NO: 2009031403 in speaking title, so users can understand which topic you are talking about) v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
371 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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