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Animals should not be used for the benefit of human beings unless there is evidence that the animals do not suffer in any way. v.2

Animals should not be used for the benefit of human beings unless there is evidence that the animals do not suffer in any way. v. 2
There is a lot of controversy about using animals for human needs. Animal rights activists are trying to stop all modern and traditional activities, which involve killing animals or cause their suffering. Traditionalists are trying to convince the community that using living creatures for men's needs is natural and cannot be avoided in everyday life. In this essay, we will explore this subject. Activists, who defend animal rights, are telling the world that people should not use animals in any way. Moreover, they say that animals should have exactly same rights as humans do. The reason is that people and animals are both living creatures and there shouldn't be any difference in treating them. So-called extreme vegans are refusing to eat any food of animal origin, even milk or honey. They are trying to convince people to do the same using as an argument that killing animals and keeping them in captivity cause their suffering and not civilised. Traditionalists disagree with the statement that human should stop killing animals or using them to fulfil their needs. From the very beginning of human civilisation, there is a tradition and vital need to use animals as a food and their parts in traditional crafts. Without proteins and vitamins of animal origin, the human body wouldn't receive all nutrients it needs. Moreover, testing some medicals on animals already helped to fight many diseases people suffered from. I think, people have the moral right to use animals to their benefit, to some extent. I am sure, we should not cause them suffer and die for our fun. Although, using animals for food is natural for humans as predators, but as civilised predators, we should make sure to use only humane ways of killing.
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a lot of
controversy about using
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animals
for
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human
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needs
.
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Animal
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rights
activists are trying to
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stop
all modern and traditional activities, which involve
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killing
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animals
or cause their suffering. Traditionalists are trying to convince the community that using living creatures for
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men
's
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needs
is natural and cannot
be avoided
in everyday life. In this essay, we will explore this subject.

Activists, who defend
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animal
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rights
, are telling the world that
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people
should not
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use
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animals
in any way.
Moreover
, they say that
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animals
should have exactly same
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rights
as
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humans
do. The reason is that
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people
and
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animals
are both living creatures and there shouldn't be any difference in treating them.
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So
-called extreme vegans are refusing to eat any food of
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animal
origin, even milk or honey. They are trying to convince
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people
to do the same using as an argument that
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killing
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animals
and keeping them in captivity cause their suffering and not
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civilised
.

Traditionalists disagree with the statement that
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human
should
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stop
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killing
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animals
or using them to fulfil their
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needs
. From the
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very
beginning of
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human
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civilisation
, there is a tradition and vital
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need
to
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use
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animals
as a food and their parts in traditional crafts. Without proteins and vitamins of
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animal
origin, the
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human
body wouldn't receive all nutrients it
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needs
.
Moreover
, testing
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some
medicals on
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animals
already
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helped
to fight
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many
diseases
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people
suffered from.

I
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think
,
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people
have the moral
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right
to
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use
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animals
to their benefit, to
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some
extent. I am sure, we should not cause them suffer and
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die
for our fun. Although, using
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animals
for food is natural for
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humans
as predators,
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but
as
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civilised
predators, we should
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make
sure to
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use
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only
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humane
ways of
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killing
.
2Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
40Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes

IELTS essay Animals should not be used for the benefit of human beings unless there is evidence that the animals do not suffer in any way. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
289 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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