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Wild animals have no use in the 21<sup>st</sup> century and trying to preserve animals now is just wastage of money. v.3

Wild animals have no use in the 21<sup>st</sup> century and trying to preserve animals now is just wastage of money. v. 3
It is sometimes argued that wildlife has been declining in recent years at a startling pace and that deploying any scheme to protect endangered animals would be wastage of money. However, I completely disagree with this idea. In one hand, it can be argued that wild animals are becoming increasingly extinct in present decade. One of the grave reasons for this decline is ever increasing numbers of human on the earth which have fueled up the demands for more houses and roads. At the same time, the need of self-sufficiency in food for the human has led to a destruction of natural habitats. So depletion of green spaces ends up with decreased number of wild animals.   For instance, chemical farming is required to meet the demand for cheaper food at any cost, and these practices are driven by greater demands for natural habitats such as woodland, forests and hills to be converted into farmlands. Urbanisation is another big factor with a greater number of people tends to live in cities and more space needed to extend cities at the expense of removing wild habitats. Nevertheless, I believe that conservation of wild creature is crucial for the human survival as well as for a healthy ecosystem and that it is worthwhile to utilise recourses to protect them. If we do not bother to deploy any targeted scheme to save animal lives, then biodiversity and ecosystem will suffer. As a result, it will have a devastating effect on the food chain for all living creatures. So the government should take more initiatives to carry out different strategies to ensure the survival of wild animals. Establishment of more zoos, as well as protecting natural areas, should also be ensured by the government and the law enforcing authority. In conclusion, I would argue that wild animals are the vital part of our planet and they should be protected at every possible cost.
It is
sometimes
argued that wildlife has been declining in recent years at a startling pace and that deploying any scheme to protect endangered
animals
would be wastage of money.
However
, I completely disagree with this
idea
.

In one hand, it can
be argued
that wild
animals
are becoming
increasingly
extinct in present decade. One of the grave reasons for this decline is
ever increasing
numbers of human on the earth which have fueled up the demands for more
houses
and roads. At the same time, the need of self-sufficiency in food for the human has led to a destruction of natural habitats.
So
depletion of green spaces ends up with decreased number of wild
animals
.
 
For instance
, chemical farming
is required
to
meet
the demand for cheaper food at any cost, and these practices
are driven
by greater demands for natural habitats such as woodland, forests and hills to
be converted
into farmlands.
Urbanisation
is another
big
factor with a greater number of
people
tends to
live
in cities and more space needed to extend cities at the expense of removing wild habitats.

Nevertheless
, I believe that conservation of wild creature is crucial for the human survival
as well
as for a healthy ecosystem and that it is worthwhile to
utilise
recourses to protect them. If we do not bother to deploy any targeted scheme to save
animal
lives
, then biodiversity and ecosystem will suffer.
As a result
, it will have a devastating effect on the food chain for all living creatures.
So
the
government
should take more initiatives to carry out
different
strategies to ensure the survival of wild
animals
. Establishment of more zoos,
as well
as protecting natural areas, should
also
be ensured
by the
government
and the law enforcing authority.

In conclusion
, I would argue that wild
animals
are the vital part of our
planet and
they should
be protected
at every possible cost.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
6Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
5Mistakes
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IELTS essay Wild animals have no use in the 21<sup>st</sup> century and trying to preserve animals now is just wastage of money. v. 3

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
319 words
6.0
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