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Animals are in danger of extinction. Some people say we should protect only those animals which are useful to humans. Do you agree or disagree? v.1

Animals are in danger of extinction. Some people say we should protect only those animals which are useful to humans. v. 1
There is no doubt that due to urbanization and increasing human population, a lot of animal species are currently endangered and face extinction. While some people believe we should conserve all species of animals, others argue that only useful species should be conserved and protected. I tend to disagree, that we should be only protecting the useful animals, and in this essay I would shed more light on this argument. Mother nature has created all the different fauna and flora as equals, furthermore, we directly or indirectly play a vital role in the existence of each other. The most significant problems these endangered animals are facing are due to the human race, which is rapidly growing and urbanising. For instance, pigeons create a lot of nuisance in cities by creating their nests spreading dirty faecal matters everywhere. Secondly, they are not that useful to most people around the globe, except a few countries where they are consumed as food. However, it’s us humans who have destroyed their natural habitat of trees due to which they try to find shelter in our houses and buildings. Many of the animals, even if they are not useful to humans, are a vital part of the natural food chain. Therefore, removing them from the food chain can cause a lot of unexpected problems. For example, lizards are not directly useful to humans, however, they play an important part in controlling the growth of small insects by consuming them as food. As a result, it’s very imperative for us to not disturb this natural food chain, and conserve all the animals. In conclusion, even though many animals may not be useful to mankind. In my opinion, and as I highlighted in the above essay, we should conserve and protect all fauna and flora. Furthermore, being the most intelligent species on earth, it also becomes our moral obligation to protect them.
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human
population,
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a lot of
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animal
species are
currently
endangered and face extinction. While
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some
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people
believe we should conserve all species of
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animals
, others argue that
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only
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useful
species should
be conserved
and protected. I tend to disagree, that we should be
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only
protecting the
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useful
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animals
, and in this essay I would shed more light on this argument.

Mother nature has created all the
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different
fauna and flora as equals,
furthermore
, we
directly
or
indirectly
play a vital role in the existence of each other. The most significant problems these endangered
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animals
are facing are due to the
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human
race, which is
rapidly
growing and
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urbanising
.
For instance
, pigeons create
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a lot of nuisance
in cities by creating their nests spreading dirty
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faecal
matters everywhere.
Secondly
, they are not that
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useful
to most
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people
around the globe, except a few countries where they
are consumed
as
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food
.
However
, it’s us
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humans
who have
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destroyed
their natural habitat of trees due to which they try to find shelter in our
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houses
and buildings.

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Many
of the
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animals
, even if they are not
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useful
to
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humans
, are a vital part of the natural
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food
chain.
Therefore
, removing them from the
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food
chain can cause
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a lot of
unexpected problems.
For example
, lizards are not
directly
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useful
to
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humans
,
however
, they play an
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important
part in controlling the growth of
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small
insects by consuming them as
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food
.
As a result
, it’s
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very
imperative for us to not disturb this natural
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food
chain, and conserve all the animals.

In conclusion
,
even though
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many
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animals
may not be
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useful
to mankind. In my opinion, and as I highlighted in the above essay, we should conserve and protect all fauna and flora.
Furthermore
, being the most intelligent species on earth, it
also
becomes our moral obligation to protect them.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8Mistakes
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IELTS essay Animals are in danger of extinction. Some people say we should protect only those animals which are useful to humans. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
315 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.0
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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