Do you want to improve your writing? Try our new evaluation service and get detailed feedback.
Check Your Text it's free

Parents think that using computers or tablets will help children's future academic career. What are the advantages and disadvantages? v.1

Parents think that using computers or tablets will help children's future academic career. What are the advantages and disadvantages? v. 1
When justice and human right have been promoting in contemporary society, whether or not corporate reckoning should be kept in the world has become a widely debated topic. While a group of people states that the death penalty could decrease the number of crimes because people do not want to lose their life, others argue that capital compensation violates the human right. In my opinion, I truly believe that such vengeance still has full of controversy and has own demerits and merits. On the one hand, the death penalty could be a killing machine. In fact, never have I heard that regulations and punishments of the law are perfect and right. Sometimes judgements of the court still have loopholes and mistakes. If the lawyers wrong to an innocent person and get him/her a corporate punishment, everything becomes irreversible. As a result, not only does an innocent person dead of the wrong judgement, his/her family members also suffer from the wrong decision from the court. However, capital torture could be an enormous warning to those intending to behave unethical behaviours. As a matter of fact, terrorism, massacre (massacre) and multiple murders, those extremely crucial and unreasonable movements have already happened in the world. Therefore, the suffering should be implemented for prohibiting those unacceptable thoughts of those behaviours in people’s mind. In conclusion, there are different arguments in the death penalty between the supporters and opponents. However, it is worthy to have a deep consideration and exploration into this topic.
When justice and human right have been promoting in contemporary society,
whether or not
corporate reckoning should be
kept
in the world has become a
widely
debated topic. While a group of
people
states that the death penalty could decrease the number of crimes
because
people
do not want to lose their
life
, others argue that capital compensation violates the human right. In my opinion, I
truly
believe that such vengeance
still
has full of controversy and has
own
demerits and merits.

On the one hand, the death penalty could be a killing machine. In fact, never have I heard that regulations and punishments of the law are perfect and right.
Sometimes
judgements of the court
still
have loopholes and mistakes. If the lawyers
wrong
to an innocent person and
get
him/her a corporate punishment, everything becomes irreversible.
As a result
, not
only
does an innocent person dead of the
wrong
judgement, his/her family members
also
suffer from the
wrong
decision from the court.

However
, capital torture could be an enormous warning to those intending to behave unethical
behaviours
. As a matter of fact, terrorism, massacre (massacre) and multiple murders, those
extremely
crucial and unreasonable movements have already happened in the world.
Therefore
, the suffering should
be implemented
for prohibiting those unacceptable thoughts of those
behaviours
in
people
’s mind.

In conclusion
, there are
different
arguments in the death penalty between the supporters and opponents.
However
, it is worthy to have a deep consideration and exploration into this topic.
10Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4Mistakes

IELTS essay Parents think that using computers or tablets will help children's future academic career. What are the advantages and disadvantages? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
248 words
This writing has been penalized,
text can't be
less than 250 words in Task 2
and less than 150 words in Task 1
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
Labels Descriptions
  • ?
    Currently is not available
  • Meet the criteria
  • Doesn't meet the criteria
Similar posts