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In many places, new homes are needed, but the only space available for building them is in the countryside. Some people believe it is more important to protect the countryside and not build new homes there. What is your opinion? v.32

In many places, new homes are needed, but the only space available for building them is in the countryside. Some people believe it is more important to protect the countryside and not build new homes there. What is your opinion? v. 32
In spite of the undeniable importance of remuneration rates, an employee's contentment is also considered a determining factor. Although fully aware of the critical role of one's salary, I personally take the view that financial aspects fade in significance compared to job satisfaction. To justify my assertion, it should be noted that feeling fulfilled is a greater motivator than pecuniary interests particularly in the long run. This is because people have a natural inclination to dedicate themselves to tasks with which they are satisfied and employment is no exception in this respect. For instance, although financial perks act as a powerful incentive, what drives people to meet tight deadlines even when the process becomes burdensome is how content they feel with the undertaking. Another justification which gives reasonable grounds to the precedence of job satisfaction over high earnings is that the former is automatically followed by the latter. In other words, if an employee is pleased with their responsibilities, they are more likely to try harder and hopefully climb the career ladder. This is amply illustrated by job promotion to a higher position through the corporate hierarchy. Needless to say that someone in a managerial position is in higher income brackets than a regular office clerk. In summary, while it is logical to assume that payment is immensely important, I believe that employment satisfaction is far more essential. The main reason behind this assumption is that this feeling of content is a significant motivating factor. Moreover, happy employees have greater tendency to demonstrate commitment and in turn earn higher wages. Votes
In spite of
the undeniable importance of remuneration rates, an employee's contentment is
also
considered a determining factor. Although
fully
aware of the critical role of one's salary, I
personally
take the view that financial aspects fade in significance compared to job satisfaction.

To justify my assertion, it should
be noted
that feeling fulfilled is a greater motivator than pecuniary interests
particularly
in the long run. This is
because
people
have a natural inclination to dedicate themselves to tasks with which they
are satisfied
and employment is no exception in this respect.
For instance
, although financial perks act as a powerful incentive, what drives
people
to
meet
tight deadlines even when the process becomes burdensome is how content they feel with the undertaking.

Another justification which gives reasonable grounds to the precedence of job satisfaction over high earnings is that the former is
automatically
followed by the latter.
In other words
, if an employee is
pleased
with their responsibilities, they are more likely to try harder and
hopefully
climb the career ladder. This is
amply
illustrated by job promotion to a higher position through the corporate hierarchy. Needless to say that someone in a managerial position is in higher income brackets than a regular office clerk.

In summary, while it is logical to assume that payment is
immensely
important
, I believe that employment satisfaction is far more essential. The main reason behind this assumption is that this feeling of content is a significant motivating factor.
Moreover
, happy employees have greater tendency to demonstrate commitment and in turn earn higher wages.

Votes
9Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
0Mistakes

IELTS essay In many places, new homes are needed, but the only space available for building them is in the countryside. Some people believe it is more important to protect the countryside and not build new homes there. What is your opinion? v. 32

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
260 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 6.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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