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Although the prices of fuels have greatly increased over the last decade or two, it is argued that further increases in fuel prices are the only way to reduce world consumption of fuel and lessen pressure on the world’s fuel resources. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? v.8

Although the prices of fuels have greatly increased over the last decade or two, it is argued that further increases in fuel prices are the only way to reduce world consumption of fuel and lessen pressure on the world’s fuel resources. with this statement? v. 8
While many feel that increasing fuel prices is the only way to reduce consumption, this is more of an opinion than a fact. In this essay, I’m going to share a core reason why increasing prices alone will not reduce the pressure on the world’s fuel resources and a few alternatives to reduce consumption. The primary reason why increasing prices will not work is because fossil fuels are integral to the growth aspirations of a country and the masses will continue to afford key resources like fuel that helps the economy grow. This can be validated historically when, despite the steep rise in fuel prices since 1960, the consumption has only increased. Expecting consumption to reduce by trying to hike the prices is like expecting the world to stop drinking water by increasing its price. The second reason why the demand for fossil fuels will not reduce is because there is no other suitable alternative. Solar, wind, thermal and nuclear power is still not able to meet the demands of the growing countries. In the absence of a good alternative energy source, fossil fuels will continue to remain in popular demand. However, all is not lost. The sentiment to reduce our dependence on fossil fuels is well received and there are ways to reduce our consumption of this precious and finite resource. The first method is through mass education. Fossil fuels are the primary reason for air pollution and there is significant evidence that this is depleting our Ozone layer. Informing people about the long term damaging effects of the prolonged fossil fuel usage on human health are the way to go. Awareness can stimulate action. Improving public transport is another way for the public to reduce using fossil fuels. In summary, fossil fuels are a rare and precious commodity, but it is also the only commodity that many nations have to grow. We must avoid simplifying the answer and come up with creative ideas if we are going to really reduce the consumption of fossil fuels.
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resources and a few alternatives to
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fuels
are integral to the growth aspirations of a country and the masses will continue to afford key resources like
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fuel
that
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helps
the economy grow. This can
be validated
historically
when, despite the steep rise in
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prices
since 1960, the
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increased. Expecting
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is like expecting the world to
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its
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. The second
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will not
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there is no other suitable alternative. Solar, wind, thermal and nuclear power is
still
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the demands of the growing countries. In the absence of a
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good
alternative energy source,
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fossil
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continue to remain
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our dependence on
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is
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well received
and there are ways to
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our
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consumption
of this precious and finite resource. The
first
method is through mass education.
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Fossil
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fuels
are the primary
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reason
for air pollution and there is significant evidence that this is depleting our Ozone layer. Informing
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people
about the long term damaging effects of the prolonged
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fuel
usage on human health are the way to go. Awareness can stimulate action. Improving public transport is another way for the public to
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using
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fuels.

In summary,
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are a rare and precious commodity,
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.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes
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IELTS essay Although the prices of fuels have greatly increased over the last decade or two, it is argued that further increases in fuel prices are the only way to reduce world consumption of fuel and lessen pressure on the world’s fuel resources. with this statement? v. 8

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
337 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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