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Although the prices of fuels have greatly increased over the last decade or two, it is argued that further increases in fuel prices are the only way to reduce world consumption of fuel and lessen pressure on the world’s fuel resources. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? v.5

Although the prices of fuels have greatly increased over the last decade or two, it is argued that further increases in fuel prices are the only way to reduce world consumption of fuel and lessen pressure on the world’s fuel resources. with this statement? v. 5
As a matter of fact, changing gas prices have occupied a significant figure of people’s debates and discussions. It is a reason for a considerable number of issues. No one can deny that, everything has double folds. Some people tend to think that increments in gas price are a proper way to drop off the fuel consumption. However, another group firmly believes that, there are more solutions. This essay will deal with that both views in order to reach the appropriate opinion. On one hand, some individuals argue that, government must expand the cost of gas to decrease its use, and they have their own reasons: First, there is a massive use of gas which has enormous negative effects on health and the economy. Moreover, that boosts the air and water pollution, which have adverse effects on agriculture and children's health. For instance, people who live beside factories, always get lung problems, because of the emitted gases from these firms, consequently, children are not well being. Nevertheless, others believe that, the increment of fuel prices is not the major solution for the following causes, Firstly, government can cooperate with the inventors to invent a new natural source for energy production such as, Solar energy. For example, using sunlight to work up the machines of firms can solve the excessive use of gas. Furthermore, the industrial revolution is the precursor of the economy. Any decrease in the profit margin of the huge corporations that lead the world financially will have a negative effect on the economic conditions. To conclude, although both concepts seem convincing, as each one of them has its rationale. Yet, I totally support the second point of view which believe that, there are more solutions rather than increasing the cost of fuel. h
As a matter of fact, changing
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gas
prices have occupied a significant figure of
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people
’s debates and discussions. It is a reason for a considerable number of issues. No one can deny that, everything has double folds.
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Some
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people
tend to
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think
that increments in
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
gas
price are a proper way to drop off the fuel consumption.
However
, another group
firmly
believes that, there are more solutions. This essay will deal with that both views in order to reach the appropriate opinion.

On one hand,
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some
individuals argue that,
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government
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must
expand the cost of
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gas
to decrease its
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
, and they have their
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own
reasons:
First
, there is a massive
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use
of
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gas
which has enormous
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
negative
effects on health and the economy.
Moreover
, that boosts the air and water pollution, which have adverse effects on agriculture and children's health.
For instance
,
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people
who
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live
beside factories, always
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get
lung problems,
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because
of the emitted gases from these firms,
consequently
, children are not
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well being
.

Nevertheless
, others believe that, the increment of fuel prices is not the major solution for the following causes,
Firstly
,
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
can cooperate with the inventors to invent a new natural source for energy production such as, Solar energy.
For example
, using sunlight to work up the machines of firms can solve the excessive
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
gas
.
Furthermore
, the industrial revolution is the precursor of the economy. Any decrease in the profit margin of the huge corporations that lead the world
financially
will have a
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
negative
effect on the economic conditions.

To conclude
, although both concepts seem convincing, as each one of them has its rationale.
Yet
, I
totally
support the second point of view which believe that, there are more solutions
rather
than increasing the cost of fuel.

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h
13Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes
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IELTS essay Although the prices of fuels have greatly increased over the last decade or two, it is argued that further increases in fuel prices are the only way to reduce world consumption of fuel and lessen pressure on the world’s fuel resources. with this statement? v. 5

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
294 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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