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Although online news on the market is becoming quite popular, newspapers will still remain as the main source of accurate news. To what extent do you agree? v.2

Although online news on the market is becoming quite popular, newspapers will still remain as the main source of accurate news. v. 2
The Internet is beginning to rival newspapers as the best place to find information about what is happening in the world. I believe that this trend will continue, and the Internet will soon be just as important as the traditional press. On the one hand, I believe that newspapers will continue to be a vital source of information, even in the Internet age. Firstly, newspapers are the most traditional means of communicating the news, and not everyone wants to or is able to use the Internet instead. For example, old people or those in rural areas might not have the ability or opportunity to get online, while many of us simply prefer newspapers even if we do have Internet access. Secondly, newspapers can be trusted as reliable sources of news because they employ professional journalists and editors. Finally, many people like the experience of holding and reading a paper rather than looking at a computer screen. However, the Internet is likely to become just as popular as newspapers for a variety of reasons. The main reason is that it allows us much faster access to news in real time and wherever we are, on different gadgets and mobile devices. Another key benefit of online news compared to newspapers is the ability to share articles, discuss them with other people, give our views, and even contribute with our own updates on social media. For example, there has been an explosion in the use of platforms like Twitter and YouTube where anyone can share their news and views. A final point is that this source of news is less damaging to the environment. In conclusion, I disagree with the view that newspapers will continue to be the main source of news, because I believe that the Internet will soon be equally important.
The Internet is beginning to rival
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newspapers
as the best place to find information about

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what
is happening in the world. I believe that this trend will continue, and the Internet
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will


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soon
be
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just
as
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important
as the traditional press.

On the one hand, I believe that
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newspapers
will continue to be a vital source of

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information
, even in the Internet age.
Firstly
,
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newspapers
are the most traditional means of

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communicating
the
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news
, and not everyone wants to or is able to
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use
the Internet
instead
.

For example
,
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old
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people
or those in rural areas might not have the ability or opportunity to

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get
online, while
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many
of us
simply
prefer
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newspapers
even if we do have Internet access.

Secondly
,
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newspapers
can
be trusted
as reliable sources of
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news
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because
they employ

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professional
journalists and editors.
Finally
,
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many
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people
like the experience of holding

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and
reading a paper
rather
than looking at a computer screen.

However
, the Internet is likely to become
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just
as popular as
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newspapers
for a variety of

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reasons
. The main reason is that it
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allows
us much faster access to
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news
in real time
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and


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wherever
we are, on
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different
gadgets and mobile devices. Another key benefit of
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online


news compared to
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newspapers
is the ability to share articles, discuss them with other

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people
, give our views, and even contribute with our
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
own
updates on social media. For

example, there has been an explosion in the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
of platforms like Twitter and YouTube

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where
anyone can share their
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news
and views. A final point is that this source of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
news
Please add a punctuation mark at the end of paragraph
is


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less
damaging to the environment.

In conclusion
, I disagree with the view that
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newspapers
will continue to be the main source

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of
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news
,
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because
I believe that the Internet will
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soon
be
equally
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important
.
3Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
14Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
17Mistakes

IELTS essay Although online news on the market is becoming quite popular, newspapers will still remain as the main source of accurate news. v. 2

Essay
  American English
21 paragraphs
300 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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