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All parents want the best opportunities for their children. There are some people who think schools should teach children skills but others think having a range of subjects is better for the children's future. Discuss both views and give your opinion. taught various subjects at schools. v.7

All parents want the best opportunities for their children. There are some people who think schools should teach children skills but others think having a range of subjects is better for the children's future. taught various subjects at schools. v. 7
In the fast growing world, Education is the primary skill to be successful. However, this growth is forcing every parent to be a more responsible parent, for their children. The way, in which people think about the education differs. Some believe their kids learning a multiple variety of books is important and on the other hand, some think, having a range of different skill sets, may increase their success rates. In my opinion, I believe range of subjects can give you more domain knowledge, while on the other case, learning skills can make them a better person in their real life, thereby enhancing the ability to stand independently in the society. On one hand, learning a wide collection of books and themes, could improve your technical skills. Additionally, if a person is interested in learning a lot of books he could go for this option. Moreover, you can be gaining lots of knowledge in multiple areas. For example, a person who has studied a wide range of subjects, will be in upfront than the person who have studied only limited subjects in a curriculum. On the other hand, Every student, who is studying in the school, should be taught some additional skills other than the normal syllabus. This in turn improves the self confidence in oneself. For instance, in this competitive world, a person may not attain a job, for the course he got certified. But if he knows any of the additional soft skills, he would be getting an option to start his own business. To conclude, In my opinion, I feel learning and gaining enormous amount of content in the study plan can help in improving the careers. But on the other hand, learning soft skills along with this will make him an all rounder.
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growing world, Education is the primary
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people
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about the education differs.
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believe their kids
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learning
a multiple variety of books is
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important
and on the
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hand
,
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some
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think
, having a range of
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different
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skill
sets, may increase their success rates. In my opinion, I believe range of subjects can give you more domain knowledge, while on the
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other
case,
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learning
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skills
can
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make
them a better
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person
in their real life, thereby enhancing the ability to stand
independently
in the society.

On one
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hand
,
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learning
a wide collection of books and themes, could
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improve
your technical
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skills
.
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, if a
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person
is interested
in
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learning
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a lot of
books he could go for this option.
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, you can be gaining lots of knowledge in multiple areas.
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, a
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person
who has studied a wide range of subjects, will be in
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upfront
than the
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who have studied
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only
limited subjects in a curriculum.

On the
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other
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, Every student, who is studying in the school, should
be taught
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some
additional
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skills
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other
than the normal syllabus. This in turn
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improves
the
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self confidence
in oneself.
For instance
, in this competitive world, a
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person
may not attain a job, for the course he
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got
certified.
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But
if he knows any of the additional soft
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skills
, he would be getting an option to
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start
his
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own
business.

To conclude
, In my opinion, I feel
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learning
and gaining enormous amount of content in the study plan can
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help
in improving the careers.
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But
on the
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other
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hand
,
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learning
soft
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skills
along with this will
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make
him an
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all rounder
.
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IELTS essay All parents want the best opportunities for their children. There are some people who think schools should teach children skills but others think having a range of subjects is better for the children's future. taught various subjects at schools. v. 7

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
297 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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