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All education (primary, secondary and further education) should be free to all people and paid and managed by the government. Do you agree or disagree with this statement? v.2

All education (primary, secondary and further education) should be free to all people and paid and managed by the government. v. 2
In the era of modern, discipline is a fragment of people's life. It is impossible to live in the world without the discipline of capability. Such as rudimentary counting, which is used by the masses in their daily routine. Some experts ponder that all science of students (high, secondary as well as further) ought to be free to all masses, which should be paid and managed by the authorities. I strongly agree with the given hook. There are many causes behind this. And I will discuss certain reasons and add my specific conclusion in the following paragraphs. Since the culture comes in life, more and more people want to obtain the higher study for their many purposes. First reason is that, it is an expensive method for the growth of people. To cite an example, some people who belong to the middle class family. As a result, some schools like private schools offer the highest fees, for the information of students. They are not able to approach studies in their life. Hence, the government should be yielded free learning to all students. Moreover, people know very well about the situation of the authorities. The ministry charges the tax on the products, which is generated by the state. For instance, they get high income from these things. They do not maintain the public facilities in their state. Due to this, they save the wages. Therefore, people claim that these salaries are achieved from products. So that, the ministry should be donated free training to all pupils. On the other side, some people claim that they should not invest the money on the discipline. For example, if they do not give, it is impossible to get the wages again. In this way, they are not able to obtain the earn revenue. They are also enabled to maintain the old facilities. To conclude, even though the regime provides the amenities to all people, yet it's the best law for giving the free learning to all learners. I deem that it is the responsibility of the authorities for offering the free studies in their heart.
In the era of modern, discipline is a fragment of
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people
's life. It is impossible to
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live
in the world without the discipline of capability. Such as rudimentary counting, which is
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used
by the masses in their daily routine.
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Some
experts ponder that all science of students (high, secondary
as well
as
further
) ought to be
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free
to all masses, which should
be paid
and managed by the authorities. I
strongly
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agree
with the
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given
hook. There are
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many
causes behind this. And I will discuss certain reasons and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
add
my specific conclusion in the following paragraphs.

Since the culture
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comes
in life, more and more
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people
want to obtain the higher study for their
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many
purposes.
First
reason is that, it is an expensive method for the growth of
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people
. To cite an example,
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some
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people
who belong to the middle
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class
family.
As a result
,
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some
schools like private schools offer the highest fees, for the information of students. They are not able to approach studies in their life.
Hence
, the
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government
should
be yielded
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free
learning to all students.

Moreover
,
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people
know
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very
well about the situation of the authorities. The ministry charges the tax on the products, which
is generated
by the state.
For instance
, they
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get
high income from these things. They do not maintain the public facilities in their state. Due to this, they save the wages.
Therefore
,
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people
claim that these salaries
are achieved
from products.
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So
that, the ministry should
be donated
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free
training to all pupils.

On the other side,
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some
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people
claim that they should not invest the money on the discipline.
For example
, if they do not give, it is impossible to
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get
the wages again. In this way, they are not able to obtain
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the earn
revenue. They are
also
enabled to maintain the
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old
facilities.

To conclude
,
even though
the regime provides the amenities to all
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people
,
yet
it's the best law for giving the
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free
learning to all learners. I deem that it is the responsibility of the authorities for offering the
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free
studies in their heart.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8Mistakes

IELTS essay All education (primary, secondary and further education) should be free to all people and paid and managed by the government. v. 2

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
351 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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