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All education (primary, secondary and further education) should be free to all people and paid and managed by the government. v.3

All education (primary, secondary and further education) should be free to all people and paid and managed by the government. v. 3
Education is an important part of everyone's life and it plays a very important role in the growth of an individual. Making education free for everyone and managing all by the government will be a very big step towards the rapid growth of a society. All parents want to make their children educated by sending them to school, colleges but sometimes due to the lack of resources, they have to deprive their children even from the basic education. By making education free of all will ensure that nobody will miss education just because they can’t afford to pay. A government's step of making the education free will set an example in our society. It will show that if you have a strong will and determination to study and prosper, not having any money or resource will not stop you from making a paradigm shift. Education with no fees will identify all those talents which can be at top given education and guidance but get lost because their parents can’t afford to pay for schools. Everyone will stand equal chance to succeed. It will increase the literacy rate of that country and will improve the growth of that country as well. It was seen in the past that countries having higher literacy rates have been more successful. By making education free, a majority of people will be educated, making overall a positive environment in our society. There will be fewer crimes in society. Educating people will be making them more responsible. Governments should put more emphasis on education by making it free. Just like food and shelter education should also be a basic right and free for everyone.
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role in the growth of an individual. Making
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education
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free
for everyone and managing all by the
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government
will be a
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step towards the rapid growth of a
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society
. All parents want to
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make
their children educated by sending them to school, colleges
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sometimes
due to the lack of resources, they
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have to
deprive their children even from the basic
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education
. By making
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education
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free
of all will ensure that nobody will miss
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education
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they can’t afford to pay.

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government
's step of making the
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education
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will set an example in our
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. It will
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show
that if you have a strong will and determination to study and prosper, not having any money or resource will not
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stop
you from making a paradigm shift.

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given
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education
and guidance
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their parents can’t afford to pay for schools. Everyone will stand equal chance to succeed. It will increase the literacy rate of that country and will
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the growth of that country
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. It was
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seen
in the past that countries having higher literacy rates have been more successful. By making
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education
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free
, a majority of
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people
will
be educated
, making
overall
a
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positive
environment in our
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society
. There will be fewer crimes in
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society
. Educating
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people
will be making them more responsible.

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Governments
should put more emphasis on
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education
by making it
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free
.
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like food and shelter
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education
should
also
be a basic right and
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free
for everyone.
3Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
20Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay All education (primary, secondary and further education) should be free to all people and paid and managed by the government. v. 3

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
277 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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