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All education and healthcare should be funded by the government and free for everyone. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.4

All education and healthcare should be funded by the government and free for everyone. v. 4
Healthcare and education are both essential aspects of a society. While some people believed that government should provide such types of services free of cost, others oppose this view. I strongly agree that providing these facilities is a government responsibility and following essay will explain various reasons for my point. Firstly, nowadays, health and education become very much expensive and costly. As a result, many peoples cannot afford these types of facilities, causing an increase in death and the illiteracy rate. For example, in Indian rural areas, uneducated and ill person numbers are enormously increasing, and its main reason is high fees of doctors and schools. But this problem can be solved if ministry starts funding hospitals and educational institutes who in exchange will provide their services free or at cheap rate. Therefore, to increase the literacy rate and well-being of individuals, government should fund medical and school services. Secondly, healthy and educated peoples play a vital role in the development of the country. Higher study and better medical facilities will make a person a valuable asset and so investment in such services will be a beneficial for the country in a long term. For instance, a survey in Canada says that, 80% of the country growth is because of citizens who are literate and healthy. However, lack of study and health will significantly affect the nation’s growth. Hence, for the betterment of society and the nation, schooling and medical should be free. In conclusion, education and health are the basic necessity of a human. But who will provide these services? If government takes initiative and provide such facilities free of cost, it will not only help to the poor section of society, but also helps in developing nation.
Healthcare and education are both essential aspects of a society. While
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some
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people
believed that
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government
should
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provide
such types of
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services
free of cost, others oppose this view. I
strongly
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agree
that providing these facilities is a
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government
responsibility and following essay will
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explain
various reasons for my point.

Firstly
, nowadays, health and education become
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very
much expensive and costly.
As a result
,
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many
peoples cannot afford these types of facilities, causing an increase in death and the illiteracy rate.
For example
, in Indian rural areas, uneducated and ill person numbers are
enormously
increasing, and its main reason is high fees of doctors and schools.
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But
this problem can
be solved
if ministry
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starts
funding hospitals and educational institutes who in exchange will
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provide
their
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services
free or at
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cheap
rate.
Therefore
, to increase the literacy rate and well-being of individuals,
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government
should fund medical and school services.

Secondly
, healthy and educated peoples play a vital role in the development of the country. Higher study and better medical facilities will
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make
a person a valuable asset and
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so
investment in such
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services
will be a beneficial for the country in a long term.
For instance
, a survey in Canada says that, 80% of the country growth is
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because
of citizens who are literate and healthy.
However
, lack of study and health will
significantly
affect the nation’s growth.
Hence
, for the betterment of society and the nation, schooling and medical should be free.

In conclusion
, education and health are the basic necessity of a human.
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But
who will
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provide
these
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services
? If
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government
takes initiative and
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provide
such facilities free of cost, it will not
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only
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help
to the poor section of society,
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but
also
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helps
in developing nation.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay All education and healthcare should be funded by the government and free for everyone. v. 4

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
289 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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