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People believe that in order to reduce road accidents it should be mandatory for drivers to retake the driving test every 3 years. Do you agree or disagree with the above statement? v.1

People believe that in order to reduce road accidents it should be mandatory for drivers to retake the driving test every 3 years. v. 1
“Accident brings tears, safety brings cheers”. It is said that assessing drivers at regular intervals of time can increase their efficiency of driving which successively reduce the road accidents. I completely agree with the statement and in this essay, I intend to delve into the points which elaborate my view. Firstly, most of the accidents occurring mainly because of driver’s fault. For example, sleeping while driving, talking and texting on the phone, speeding, carelessness is some factors contributing to the major and minor accidents. Secondly, age is a factor which can add up some problems to the motorist. Usually, licence is given for a minimum of 20 years validity (depending on the country rules). During this time period, being human, a lot of changes can happen in a human body. For instance, the blurriness of vision, alcohol addiction, physical impairments due to various diseases. These are also add-ons for the road accidents. In this instance, it is advisable that, in order to identify these conditions and to avoid certain casualties, a law should be implemented in the mandatory driving test every 3 years. Furthermore, as per the survey conducted by the Road safety regulatory committee in 2017, around 1000 people are dying in road each month and more than 5000 casualties. The number is alarmingly increasing each year. In most of the countries, the driver has to undergo learner’s assess for only once when they apply for the license. It is advisable that, the authorities should implement law to conduct both medical analysis and the chauffeur evaluation at regular intervals. By providing smooth roads, keeping safety signals at each point, the government can reduce the hazard to an extent. Sometimes, the depth of the wreckage caused by these accidents can be more severe than death. To put it in a nutshell, I pen down, saying that, every year, millions of travellers are dying in the streets. Precaution is always better than cure. Thus, for being safe and keeping others secure, it is good to take driving trial seasonally. Be cautious, life is precious.
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“Accident
brings tears, safety brings cheers”. It
is said
that assessing drivers at regular intervals of time can increase their efficiency of
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driving
which
successively
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reduce
the
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road
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accidents
. I completely
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agree
with the statement and in this essay, I intend to delve into the points which elaborate my view.

Firstly
, most of the
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accidents
occurring
mainly
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because
of driver’s fault.
For example
, sleeping while
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driving
, talking and texting on the phone, speeding, carelessness is
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some
factors contributing to the major and minor
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accidents
.
Secondly
, age is a factor which can
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add
up
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some
problems to the motorist.
Usually
,
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licence
is
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given
for a minimum of 20 years validity (depending on the country
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rules
). During this time period, being human,
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a lot of
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changes
can happen in a human body.
For instance
, the blurriness of vision, alcohol addiction, physical impairments due to various diseases. These are
also
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add
-ons for the
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road
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accidents
. In this instance, it is advisable that, in order to identify these conditions and to avoid certain casualties, a law should
be implemented
in the mandatory
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driving
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test
every 3 years.
Furthermore
, as per the survey conducted by the
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Road
safety regulatory committee in 2017, around 1000
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people
are dying in
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road
each month and more than 5000 casualties. The number is
alarmingly
increasing each year.

In most of the countries, the driver
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has to
undergo
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learner’s
assess for
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only
once when they apply for the license. It is advisable that, the authorities should implement law to conduct both medical analysis and the chauffeur evaluation at regular intervals. By providing smooth
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roads
, keeping safety signals at each point, the
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government
can
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reduce
the hazard to an extent.
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Sometimes
, the depth of the wreckage caused by these
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accidents
can be more severe than death.

To put it in a nutshell, I pen down, saying that, every year, millions of
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travellers
are dying in the streets. Precaution is always better than cure.
Thus
, for being safe and keeping others secure, it is
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good
to take
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driving
trial
seasonally
. Be cautious, life is precious.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes
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IELTS essay People believe that in order to reduce road accidents it should be mandatory for drivers to retake the driving test every 3 years. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
343 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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