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all day meeting at a local hotel 1. liked about the hotel 2. why unhappy for the food 3. methods to improve v.1

all day meeting at a local hotel 1. liked about the hotel 2. why unhappy for the food 3. methods to improve v. 1
Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing this letter in regards to a feedback I received during the recent visit to your hotel. Our company had organised an all-day meeting at your hotel and there are some things which I would like to bring it to your notice. Firstly, all the participants liked the ambience of the restaurant, the internal decoration with all the flowers that had a soothing effect on all of us. They also added, the reception from the staff members and the infrastructure that was provided, including the audio quality, the projector screen was top notch and requires a special mention. My staff were very much unhappy about the food that was being served. They told me that the food quality was not up to the mark, the taste being just okay. They even gave a feedback that sometimes they had to wait for a longer time for a particular dish being served and at times food being cold. This made them really feel bad. With all the feedback I received, I would like to suggest you to work on the quality of the food by hiring a few experts with great experience in a particular cuisine, thereby the quality as well as the taste of the food increases. Moving forward, please make sure that your staff keeps a constant check on the food being served and that there should not be any delay. Summing up, the visit was excellent with a few minor drawbacks. Am sure you guys can work on them in the future. Thanks, Sandesh Srinivas
Dear Sir or Madam,

I am writing this letter
Use "in regard to", "with regard to", or more simply "regarding".
in regards to
a feedback I received during the recent visit to your hotel. Our
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company
had
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organised
an all-day meeting at your hotel and there are
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some
things which I would like to bring it to your notice.

Firstly
, all the participants liked the ambience of the restaurant, the internal decoration with all the flowers that had a soothing effect on all of us. They
also
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
added
, the reception from the staff members and the infrastructure that
was provided
, including the audio
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quality
, the projector screen was
This word is normally spelled with hyphen.
top notch
and requires a special mention.

My staff were
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very
much unhappy about the
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food
that was
being served
. They
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told
me that the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
food
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
quality
was not up to the mark, the taste being
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just
okay. They even gave a feedback that
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sometimes
they had to wait for a longer time for a particular dish
being served
and at times
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food
being
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cold
. This made them
really
feel
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bad
.

With all the feedback I received, I would like to suggest you to work on the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
quality
of the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
food
by hiring a few experts with great experience in a particular cuisine, thereby the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
quality
as well
as the taste of the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
food
increases. Moving forward,
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please
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make
sure that your staff
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keeps
a constant
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check
on the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
food
being served
and that there should not be any delay.

Summing up, the visit was excellent with a few minor drawbacks. Am sure you guys can work on them in the future.

Thanks,

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Sandesh
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Srinivas
3Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
10Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
5Mistakes

IELTS essay all day meeting at a local hotel 1. liked about the hotel 2. why unhappy for the food 3. methods to improve v. 1

Essay
  American English
8 paragraphs
261 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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