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You recently organized an all-day meeting for your company, which took place in a local hotel. In their feedback, participants at the meeting said that they liked the hotel, but they were unhappy about the food that was served for lunch. -Say what the part v.2

You recently organized an all-day meeting for your company, which took place in a local hotel. In their feedback, participants at the meeting said that they liked the hotel, but they were unhappy about the food that was served for lunch. -Say what the part v. 2
A long time ago a man tamed a dog. He was just leaving some feed nearby the home for wild animals with the hope that after they had eaten it, they would not attack and get used to neighbourhood. And so that happen, but in an even better way. They not only got used to him, but also they became dependent. From that very moment he started using it, for food, for defence, for transportation. Through the many years man’s needs were becoming bigger, more complicated, so he had started using animals on an industrial scale. But the more he wanted the less he was thinking about animals and their conditions. He stopped giving them any care thinking only about his goods. But the question is 'is it bad? ’. Nowadays, many people might say ‘yes, it is’. They think that the things that we do to animals, such as killing them, testing medicine, cosmetics and other chemistry on them are horrible. According to their point of view, animals should have the same rights and conditions to man. But just a few years ago most of the people would not even think about it, their answer always would be ‘of course not’. Through the time we are starting to get used to be responsible for the environment and of course it is a great decision and a big step forward to best for us and a planet. But is it right in relation to animals? Because no matter how much we care we still need a food, clothes and etc. That we get from animals. And there is no way to get all of it with high quality, without them and their pain and deaths, no matter how hard we try to synthesize it or get from plants. You might think that the thing that we are able to do is to at least reduce the pain they are gaining. And yes, it is, but the problem is the financial side of it. Because it’s very expensive and difficult to contain animals in humane conditions and not to use them for testing. If we do, the things’ costs will extremely increase and not everyone is willing it and should even he be? From the ethical footprint there are also questions. Do we kill animals? Yes, the animals that we raise, feed and contain. Is it bad? Also, what does ‘humanity conditions’ and ‘the same rights’ means? Do they really need it? In conclusion I could say even I understand the reason of the first opinion, I mostly prefer the second one. The very fact that we care about it means a lot, it is truly good, but we shouldn’t forget about ourselves and do not cross the line.
A long time ago a
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man
tamed a dog. He was
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just
leaving
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some
feed nearby the home for wild
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animals
with the hope that after they had eaten it, they would not attack and
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get
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used
to
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neighbourhood
. And
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so
that happen,
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but
in an even better way. They not
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only
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got
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used
to him,
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but
also
they became dependent. From that
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very
moment he
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started
using it, for food, for
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defence
, for transportation.

Through the
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many
years
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man
’s needs were becoming bigger, more complicated,
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so
he had
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started
using
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animals
on an industrial scale.
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But
the more he wanted the less he was thinking about
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animals
and their conditions. He
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stopped
giving them any care thinking
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only
about his
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goods
.
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But
the question is 'is it
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bad
? ’. Nowadays,
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many
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people
might say ‘yes, it is’. They
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think
that the things that we do to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
animals
, such as killing them, testing medicine, cosmetics and other chemistry on them are horrible. According to their point of view,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
animals
should have the same rights and conditions to
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man
.

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But
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just
a few years ago most of the
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people
would not even
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think
about it, their answer always would be ‘
of course
not’. Through the time we are starting to
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get
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used
to be responsible for the environment and
of course
it is a great decision and a
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big
step forward to best for us and a planet.
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But
is it right in relation to
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animals
?
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Because
no matter how much we care we
still
need a food, clothes
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and etc
. That we
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get
from
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animals
. And there is no way to
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get
all of it with high quality, without them and their pain and deaths, no matter how
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hard
we try to synthesize it or
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get
from plants. You might
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think
that the thing that we are able to do is to at least
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reduce
the pain they are gaining. And yes, it is,
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but
the problem is the financial side of it.
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Because
it’s
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very
expensive and difficult to contain
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animals
in humane conditions and not to
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use
them for testing. If we do, the things’ costs will
extremely
increase and not everyone is willing it and should even he
The pronoun 'he' is usually used with a third-person or a past tense verb: "is", "was", "were".
be
? From the ethical footprint there are
also
questions. Do we kill
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animals
? Yes, the
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animals
that we raise, feed and contain. Is it
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bad
?
Also
, what does ‘humanity conditions’ and ‘the same rights’ means? Do they
really
need it?

In
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conclusion I
could say even I understand the reason of the
first
opinion, I
mostly
prefer the second one. The
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very
fact that we care about it means a lot, it is
truly
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good
,
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but
we shouldn’t forget about ourselves and do not cross the line.
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7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS essay You recently organized an all-day meeting for your company, which took place in a local hotel. In their feedback, participants at the meeting said that they liked the hotel, but they were unhappy about the food that was served for lunch. -Say what the part v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
458 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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