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All cars that burn fossil fuels should be banned and electric cars should replace them. Do you agree or disagree? v.8

All cars that burn fossil fuels should be banned and electric cars should replace them. v. 8
Vehicles that consume fossil fuels as a source of energy should be prohibited and use eco-friendly electric cars for alternatives. I strongly agree with the statements due to two facts that electric cars are more environmentally-friendly and lower cost than gas driven vehicles. To begin with, electric cars can play a vital role to overcome the environmental issues nowadays. It is clear that automobile vehicles do not require gas for charging them while petrol and diesel cars burn fossil fuels and release emission with toxic gases such as carbon dioxide directly into the air. Less emission means less chances of air pollution and global warming, our Earth will be protected and fewer species would be put on the verge of extinction. A research conducted by the Department of Environmental Sciences of Australia states that by the introduction of electric cars on roads, air and noise pollution can be reduced by 60%, that’s show a great impact of automobile vehicles on the environment. Additionally, low cost maintenance and efficiency are other predominant factors of electric cars. Although electric cars cannot drive as fast as typical vehicles, it’s reduced loud noise and more safety. Because they use sustainable resources such as sun, wind and electricity, there will be no need for petrol filling stations. Hence, instead of spending all finances to purchase fuels, it’s able to charge free with reusable sources. For example, Tesla, a renowned manufacturer of electric cars claims that newly developed electric cars have the potential to reduce an average fuel consumption up to 40%. To conclude, it is a great development of banned cars and replaced them with electric cars, which is more environmentally friendly, more economical and efficient.
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Vehicles
that consume fossil
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fuels
as a source of energy should
be prohibited
and
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use
eco-friendly
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electric
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cars
for alternatives. I
strongly
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agree
with the statements due to two facts that
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electric
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cars
are more
environmentally
-friendly and lower cost than gas driven vehicles.

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begin
with,
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electric
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cars
can play a vital role to overcome the environmental issues nowadays. It is
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clear
that automobile
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vehicles
do not require gas for charging them while petrol and diesel
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cars
burn fossil
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fuels
and release emission with toxic gases such as carbon dioxide
directly
into the air. Less emission means
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less
chances of air pollution and global warming, our Earth will
be protected
and fewer species would
be put
on the verge of extinction.
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A research
conducted by the Department of Environmental Sciences of Australia states that by the introduction of
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electric
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cars
on roads, air and noise pollution can be
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reduced
by 60%, that’s
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show
a great impact of automobile
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vehicles
on the environment.

Additionally
, low cost maintenance and efficiency are other predominant factors of
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electric
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cars
. Although
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electric
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cars
cannot drive as
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fast
as typical
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vehicles
, it’s
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reduced
loud noise and more safety.
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Because
they
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use
sustainable resources such as sun, wind and electricity, there will be no need for petrol filling stations.
Hence
,
instead
of spending all finances to
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purchase
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fuels
, it’s able to charge free with reusable sources.
For example
, Tesla, a renowned manufacturer of
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electric
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cars
claims that
newly
developed
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electric
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cars
have the potential to
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reduce
an average
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fuel
consumption up to 40%.

To conclude
, it is a great development of banned
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cars
and replaced them with
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electric
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
cars
, which is more
environmentally
friendly, more economical and efficient.
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IELTS essay All cars that burn fossil fuels should be banned and electric cars should replace them. v. 8

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
281 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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