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All cars that burn fossil fuels should be banned and electric cars should replace them. Do you agree or disagree? v.6

All cars that burn fossil fuels should be banned and electric cars should replace them. v. 6
Nowadays, cars have become a major mean of transportation, but the fossil fuel, which they burn has a detrimental impact on our environment. Some may argue that electric cars should not completely replace the traditional fuel consumption cars; however, in my opinion, I completely agree with the notion that cars which use petroleum and natural gasses should be banned and replaced by electric cars because of the increasing air pollution and global warming. On one hand, some old school people may not fully support the idea of banning traditional vehicles. The reason behind this is the mindset that cars that run on batteries are expensive and don’t have much power and acceleration for tough routes, particularly in the mountains. However, Tesla, a well known electric car manufacturing company has successfully launched a mini electric truck. According to the company, this truck can compete with any fuel consumption truck in terms of power and acceleration. On the other hand, vehicles that burn fossil fuels for ignition increase air pollution by releasing greenhouse gasses such as Carbon dioxide, nitrogen dioxide, and carbon monoxide. To illustrate, due to the heavy usage of cars that burn fossil fuel scientists have recorded an increase in acid rains and haze in many countries due to these poisonous gasses, many health issues such as loss of breath and nausea have also increased across the globe. Moreover, vehicles that burn petroleum and natural gasses cause an increase in global warming by releasing carbon dioxide in the atmosphere. Extra carbon dioxide in the atmosphere is one of the major contributors to global warming as it absorbs heat emitted by the earth and then re-emits most of it back to the earth. For example, studies have shown that the global temperature has risen by 0. 8 Celsius since 1880. Many Asian and European countries have already recorded 2019 as the hottest year. Besides, Scientists have also observed that due to the increase in global temperature the glaciers on both poles are melting faster than ever. Consequently, due to the extra amount of carbon dioxide in the atmosphere earth’s temperature is increasing drastically. In conclusion, even though some people think that cars that burn fossil fuels shouldn’t be completely replaced by electric cars, these vehicles are having a detrimental impact on our planet.
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cars
have become a major mean of transportation,
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but
the
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fossil
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fuel
, which they
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burn
has a detrimental impact on our environment.
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Some
may
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that
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electric
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cars
should not completely replace the traditional
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fuel
consumption
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cars
;
however
, in my opinion, I completely
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agree
with the notion that
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cars
which
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use
petroleum and natural
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gasses
should
be banned
and replaced by
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electric
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cars
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because
of the increasing air pollution and
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global
warming.

On one hand,
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some
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old
school
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people
may not
fully
support the
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idea
of banning traditional
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vehicles
. The reason behind this is the mindset that
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cars
that run on batteries are expensive and don’t have much power and acceleration for tough routes,
particularly
in the mountains.
However
, Tesla, a well known
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electric
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car
manufacturing
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company
has
successfully
launched a mini
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electric
truck. According to the
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company
, this truck can compete with any
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fuel
consumption truck in terms of power and acceleration.

On the other hand
,
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vehicles
that
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burn
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fossil
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fuels
for ignition
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increase
air pollution by releasing greenhouse
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gasses
such as
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Carbon
dioxide, nitrogen dioxide, and
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carbon
monoxide. To illustrate,
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due
to the heavy usage of
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cars
that
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burn
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fossil
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fuel
scientists have recorded an
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increase
in acid rains and haze in
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many
countries
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due
to these poisonous
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gasses
,
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many
health issues such as loss of breath and nausea have
also
increased across the globe.

Moreover
,
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vehicles
that
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burn
petroleum and natural
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gasses
cause an
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increase
in
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global
warming by releasing
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carbon
dioxide in the atmosphere. Extra
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carbon
dioxide in the atmosphere is one of the major contributors to
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global
warming as it absorbs heat emitted by the earth and then re-emits most of it back to the earth.
For example
, studies have shown that the
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global
temperature has risen by 0. 8 Celsius since 1880.
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Many
Asian and European countries have already recorded 2019 as the hottest year.
Besides
, Scientists have
also
observed that
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due
to the
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increase
in
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global
temperature the glaciers on both poles are melting faster than ever.
Consequently
,
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due
to the extra amount of
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carbon
dioxide in the atmosphere earth’s temperature is increasing
drastically
.

In conclusion
,
even though
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some
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people
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think
that
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cars
that
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burn
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fossil
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fuels
shouldn’t be completely replaced by
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electric
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cars
, these
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vehicles
are having a detrimental impact on our planet.
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7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay All cars that burn fossil fuels should be banned and electric cars should replace them. v. 6

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
382 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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Lexical Resource: 7.0
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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