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Airline Companies in many countries have reduced the cost of tickets. Discuss whether this is positive or negative developments. Give some examples based on your own experience. v.1

Airline Companies in many countries have reduced the cost of tickets. Discuss whether this is positive or negative developments. Give some examples based on your own experience. v. 1
Air travel nowadays very cheaper as compared to the past. In olden days only the wealthy people and business man were able to afford this mode of transport. Introduction privatization in the airline industry changes the entire scenario, companies are competing with each other to dominate in the market. For that they are doing whatever they can to attract more passengers to their carrier, in form of reduced ticket prices and cheaper business class rates and so on. I firmly believe it is a positive movement. Firstly, cheaper rates allows more people to utilize air transport for their daily needs. So that people can reach their destinations more easily and comfortably. For instance, for traveling a 500 kilometer distance, if we use road or rail transport its going to take almost 5 - 6 hours to reach the destination depending on the condition. whereas, if we use flights, we can reach the same point within 1 or 2 hours. Thats the kind of difference air travel makes in people' s daily life. Furthermore, importers and exporters can utilise this cheaper rate to the easy movement of their goods and gain some profit out of it. also consumers will get imported items cheaply as a result of this cost reduction. Secondly, tourism is the another which will be benefited from this scenario. For international tourists, air travel fare is their basic preference when they select a destination, because usually that will cost almost 20-25 percentage of their total tour cost. If a country has cheaper airline network that will definitely attract tourists and also foreign money to the host country. Like in India, currently there are number of aircraft companies are operating both in international and domestic sector. Majority of them budget flights offering tickets and other benefits in cheaper rate. As a result recent studied in Indian tourism industry revealed that many of the European travelers prefer India as there hot destination mainly because of this. On the flip side of the coin, there are some negative effects also. Aviation fuel is one of the major air pollutant, so frequent flights due to the increasing popularity makes things even worse. Moreover, this unhealthy co petition over ticket pricing eventually effect aircraft companies in the long run and some times even results in closure of their services. To recapitulate, cheaper air ticket rates are definitely a positive development in terms country' s transportation facilities even though there are some negative effects also. But the advantages clearly outweighs the disadvantages.
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travel nowadays
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compared to the past. In olden days
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only
the wealthy
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people
and business
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man
were able to afford this mode of transport. Introduction privatization in the airline industry
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changes
the entire scenario,
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companies
are competing with each other to dominate in the market. For that they are doing whatever they can to attract more passengers to their carrier, in form of
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reduced
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ticket
prices and
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cheaper
business
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class
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rates
and
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on. I
firmly
believe it is a
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positive
movement.

Firstly
,
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cheaper
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rates
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allows
more
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people
to utilize
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air
transport for their daily needs.
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that
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people
can reach their
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destinations
more
easily
and
comfortably
.
For instance
, for traveling a 500 kilometer distance, if we
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use
road or rail transport
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its
going to take almost
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5 - 6
hours to reach the
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destination
depending on the condition.
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whereas
, if we
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use
flights, we can reach the same point within 1 or 2 hours.
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the kind of difference
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air
travel
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makes
in
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people&
#039; s daily life.
Furthermore
, importers and exporters can
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utilise
this
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cheaper
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rate
to the easy movement of their
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goods
and gain
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some
profit out of it.
also
consumers will
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get
imported items
cheaply
as a result
of this cost reduction.

Secondly
, tourism is the another which will
be benefited
from this scenario. For international tourists,
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air
travel fare is their basic preference when they select a
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destination
,
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because
usually
that will cost almost 20-25 percentage of their total tour cost. If a country has
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cheaper
airline network that will definitely attract tourists and
also
foreign money to the host country. Like in India,
currently
there are number of aircraft
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companies
are operating both in international and domestic sector. Majority of them budget flights offering
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tickets
and other benefits in
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cheaper
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rate
.
As a result
recent studied in Indian tourism industry revealed that
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many
of the European travelers prefer India as there hot
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destination
mainly
because of this
.

On the flip side of the coin, there are
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some
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negative
effects
also
. Aviation fuel is one of the major
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air
pollutant,
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so
frequent flights due to the increasing popularity
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makes
things even worse.
Moreover
, this unhealthy co petition over
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ticket
pricing
eventually
effect aircraft
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companies
in the long run and
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some
times even results in closure of their services.

To recapitulate,
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cheaper
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air
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ticket
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rates
are definitely a
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positive
development in terms
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country&
#039; s transportation facilities
even though
there are
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negative
effects
also
.
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But
the advantages
clearly
outweighs the disadvantages.
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IELTS essay Airline Companies in many countries have reduced the cost of tickets. Discuss whether this is positive or negative developments. Give some examples based on your own experience. v. 1

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