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Air transport is increasingly used to export fruit and vegetables where they cannot be grown or out of season. Do the benefits of this trend outweigh the drawbacks? v.1

Air transport is increasingly used to export fruit and vegetables where they cannot be grown or out of season. Do the benefits of this trend outweigh the drawbacks? v. 1
In the last decade, it has been a rise in the amount of fruit and vegetables sent through air to places where the production is impossible or out of season. In this essay I will explain why I think there are more advantages of this mode of transport than disadvantages. The first positive point of air travel is the little time it takes to carry these products from one place to another. Daily buying fresh fruits and vegetables from all around the world in every season of the year is made possible because this. For instance, Ecuatorian bananas and Brazilian pineapples are eaten all over the globe as they are sent fast by air. Furthermore, if these were transported by water or roads they would arrive rotten and unavailable for human consumption. The negative aspects of this means of transport is that it is highly more expensive, consequently, the imported items we buy at the market have a greater price than those locally grown. Take, for example, Chinese oranges cost twice more than those locally grown but in spite of having higher prices, people carry on shopping them and that is a significant drawback for the local economy. In conclusion, nowadays, all around the world shopping availability of fresh fruits and vegetables has increased the specific nutrients and vitamins in people´s daily menu. This advantage clearly outweighs price and local economy disadvantage.
In the last decade, it has been a rise in the amount of fruit and vegetables
sent
through air to places where the production is impossible or out of season. In this essay I will
explain
why I
think
there are more advantages of this mode of transport than disadvantages.

The
first
positive
point of air travel is the
little
time it takes to carry these products from one place to another. Daily buying fresh fruits and vegetables from all around the world in every season of the year
is made
possible
because
this.
For instance
,
Ecuatorian
bananas and Brazilian pineapples
are eaten
all over the globe as they are
sent
fast
by air.
Furthermore
, if these
were transported
by water or roads they would arrive rotten and unavailable for human consumption.

The
negative
aspects of this means of transport is that it is
highly
more expensive,
consequently
, the imported items we
buy
at the market have a greater price than those
locally
grown. Take,
for example
, Chinese oranges cost twice more than those
locally
grown
but
in spite of
having higher prices,
people
carry on shopping them and
that is
a significant drawback for the local economy.

In conclusion
, nowadays, all around the world shopping availability of fresh fruits and vegetables has increased the specific nutrients and vitamins in
people´s
daily menu. This advantage
clearly
outweighs price and local economy disadvantage.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes

IELTS essay Air transport is increasingly used to export fruit and vegetables where they cannot be grown or out of season. Do the benefits of this trend outweigh the drawbacks? v. 1

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  American English
4 paragraphs
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