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Air transport is increasingly used to export fruit and vegetables to countries where they cannot be grown or are out of season. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this? v.2

Air transport is increasingly used to export fruit and vegetables to countries where they cannot be grown or are out of season. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this? v. 2
More and more fruit and vegetables are imported from some countries to nations where they are not available by air. This essay will first suggest that fresh fruit for the whole year is the primary benefit of this while price increasing is the main drawback. The main reason those products are imported to countries where they are impossible to grow is because consumers can have a chance to eat fresh products every time. Fresh crops cannot be stored for a long time unless they are frozen. Air transport, which is the fastest way to import them, is the only way to keep them fresh during the travelling time between two countries. For example, North America’s temperature is usually below 0 degree Celsius for almost 8 months every year, hence 80% of fresh harvest here are imported from South America where they can be grown easier. Despite this benefit, the high cost of those products is the disadvantage of air transport. This increasing comes from the air’s expense and the tax between countries. Because fruit and vegetables are not the last-long products, people cannot reduce the price of transportation by using the cheaper one such as ship transport or train transportation. For instance, Vietnamese’s durian, which is sold in Chinese supermarket in Canada, always has 10 times higher price than that in Vietnam due to the transportation’s fee. In conclusion, air transport may bring the freshest products to consumers in nations where they are impossible to grow, but the high cost of those can be a main reason to prevent people buying them.
More and more fruit and vegetables
are imported
from
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some
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countries
to nations where they are not available by
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air
. This essay will
first
suggest that
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fresh
fruit for the whole year is the primary benefit of this while price increasing is the main drawback.

The main reason those
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products
are imported
to
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countries
where they are impossible to grow is
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because
consumers can have a chance to eat
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fresh
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products
every
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time
.
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Fresh
crops cannot
be stored
for a long
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time
unless they
are frozen
.
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Air
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transport
, which is the fastest way to import them, is the
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only
way to
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keep
them
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fresh
during the travelling
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time
between two
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countries
.
For example
, North America’s temperature is
usually
below 0 degree Celsius for almost 8 months every year,
hence
80% of
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fresh
harvest here
are imported
from South America where they can
be grown
easier.

Despite this benefit, the high cost of those
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products
is the disadvantage of
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air
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transport
. This increasing
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comes
from the
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air’s
expense and the tax between
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countries
.
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Because
fruit and vegetables are not the last-long
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products
,
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people
cannot
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reduce
the price of transportation by using the cheaper one such as ship
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transport
or train transportation.
For instance
, Vietnamese’s
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durian
, which
is sold
in Chinese supermarket in Canada, always has 10
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times
higher price than that in Vietnam due to the transportation’s fee.

In conclusion
,
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air
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transport
may bring the freshest
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products
to consumers in nations where they are impossible to grow,
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but
the high cost of those can be a main reason to
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prevent
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people
buying them.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay Air transport is increasingly used to export fruit and vegetables to countries where they cannot be grown or are out of season. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this? v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
262 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
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    Present relevant ideas
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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