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Some people argue that public transportation should be made completely free of charge. Are there more advantages over disadvantages of this decision? v.1

Some people argue that public transportation should be made completely free of charge. Are there more advantages over disadvantages of this decision? v. 1
Endorsements have had played an inevitable role in the lives of people. While some people believe that advertisements affect them negatively, others consider it a positive thing. The aim of this essay is to analyse whether advertising is fruitful for society or not and state my opinion. Advertisements are advantageous, according to some people, as consumers become aware of the variety of products available in the market. With the sufficient knowledge of the options for a particular product, it might be easier for prospective buyers to choose the product, which further results in saving of time. For instance, customers could directly ask shopkeepers for a specific model of mobile phone rather than looking for various options before making buying decisions. Therefore, it is believed that endorsements are beneficial for people. I, however, side with those people who see advertisements role as negative because people often buy products which they do not need in real. This is because big companies hire celebrities, such as movie stars and sportsmen, for the endorsements of their products, which might gravitate individuals to purchase those products. As a result, people would end up investing their hard-earned money in unnecessary possessions. If masses bought those items, they would be at higher risk of not saving enough money for hard times that might come in future. Thus, endorsements play a negative role in peoples' lives. To conclude, although adverts have some advantages, I believe that the ramifications of compelling people to buy unnecessary products are more severe. Hence, it is advised that people should not rely on endorsements only instead of weighing their actual needs.
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lives
of
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people
. While
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some
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people
believe that advertisements affect them
negatively
, others consider it a
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positive
thing. The aim of this essay is to
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analyse
whether advertising is fruitful for society or not and state my opinion.

Advertisements are advantageous, according to
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some
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people
, as consumers become aware of the variety of
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products
available in the market. With the sufficient knowledge of the options for a particular
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product
, it might be easier for prospective buyers to choose the
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product
, which
further
results in saving of time.
For instance
, customers could
directly
ask shopkeepers for a specific model of mobile phone
rather
than looking for various options
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before
making buying decisions.
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, it
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that
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endorsements
are beneficial for
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people
.

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people
who
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see
advertisements role as
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negative
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because
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people
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often
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buy
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products
which they do not need in real. This is
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because
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big
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companies
hire celebrities, such as movie stars and sportsmen, for the
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endorsements
of their
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products
, which might gravitate individuals to
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purchase
those
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products
.
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people
would
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hard
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bought
those items, they would be at higher
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risk
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enough
money for
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hard
times that might
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in future
.
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,
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endorsements
play a
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negative
role in peoples'
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lives
.

To conclude
, although adverts have
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some
advantages, I believe that the ramifications of compelling
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people
to
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buy
unnecessary
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products
are more severe.
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is advised
that
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people
should not rely on
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endorsements
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only
instead
of weighing their actual needs.
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IELTS essay Some people argue that public transportation should be made completely free of charge. Are there more advantages over disadvantages of this decision? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
268 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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