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Air pollution in cities is growing at an alarming rate. What measures could be taken to address this problem? v.1

Air pollution in cities is growing at an alarming rate. What measures could be taken to address this problem? v. 1
Air pollution can be defined as the addition of something harmful to the air at a faster rate than it can be absorbed. Everyone should be concerned about air pollution. It affects us all, and as it continues to worsen, so the environmental impact increases. One of the major causes of air pollution in cities is car use. Cars are used for even the shortest of journeys, and all efforts by governments to encourage people to use public transport seem to be failing. Industry is another major cause of pollution in our cities, but fortunately, new industrial sites are being built away from large urban centres. It is said that there are too many contributing factors for us to decide exactly which one is the main problem, but I believe that one of the most serious problems that needs tackling is the use of the car. In some cities laws have been passed concerning car use. Athens, for example, only allows a certain number of cars into the city centre each day. In my opinion, this is a good idea. With this kind of law people have no choice and are forced to use buses and trains. This ensures governments know that public transport will be used, and can therefore justify the investment and expense of ensuring the system works properly. Another thing governments could do is to force people to have their cars checked for carbon emissions and fine people with cars that produce high levels of harmful gases.
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Air
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pollution
can
be defined
as the addition of something harmful to the
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air
at a faster rate than it can
be absorbed
. Everyone should
be concerned
about
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air
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pollution
. It affects us all, and as it continues to worsen,
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so
the environmental impact increases.

One of the major causes of
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air
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pollution
in
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cities
is
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car
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use
.
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Cars
are
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used
for even the shortest of journeys, and all efforts by
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governments
to encourage
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people
to
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use
public transport seem to be failing. Industry is another major cause of
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pollution
in our
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cities
,
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but
fortunately
, new industrial sites are
being built
away from large urban
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centres
.

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that there are too
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contributing factors for us to decide exactly which one is the main problem,
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but
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use
of the
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car
. In
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some
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cities
laws have
been passed
concerning
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car
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use
. Athens,
for example
,
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only
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allows
a certain number of
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cars
into the city
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centre
each day. In my opinion, this is a
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good
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idea
. With this kind of law
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people
have no choice and
are forced
to
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use
buses and trains. This ensures
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governments
know that public transport will be
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used
, and can
therefore
justify the investment and expense of ensuring the system works
properly
.

Another thing
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governments
could do is to force
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people
to have their
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cars
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checked
for carbon emissions and fine
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people
with
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cars
that produce high levels of harmful gases.
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22Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes

IELTS essay Air pollution in cities is growing at an alarming rate. What measures could be taken to address this problem? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
250 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
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    Present relevant ideas
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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