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Agree or disagree? TPO 12 - It is better to have broad knowledge of many academic subjects than to specialize in one specific subject. v.1

Agree or disagree? TPO 12 - It is better to have broad knowledge of many academic subjects than to specialize in one specific subject. v. 1
Protecting the surrounding is becoming an important task as we have already started facing issues because of our activities. There is an argument that, efforts putting by the citizens won't be having any change in the situation and only the huge organization can do the task that actually protect the environment. I completely disagree with this as everyone's contributions really help the region to get better. Firstly, the major environmental issue like global warming and air pollution is increasing because of the burning of plastics. If each individual think to ban the usage in their house, then we can easily get rid of spreading the poison gas into the atmosphere. For instance, in India, each apartment and individual houses stopped the usage of plastic materials. Moreover, they started using the proper disposal method to dispose the used ones. As a result, there is a decrease in the level of air pollution in the area. Secondly, by giving awareness to our children in the school about the importance of planting the trees in the region and preserving the environment by reducing the contamination of the nature's product, we can protect our surroundings. For example, in Kerala, each student has planted a tree near to their house as part of awareness class and now the village has shown a rise of 10% trees. Additionally, this helped them to breath better. On the other hand, if the government can help the individual by developing the techniques to segregate and disposal of waste without having a negative impact to the nature then we can expedite the speed of the recovery of the nature. In conclusion, if each individual start taking steps to protect their surroundings, then it can make a big difference in the climate and environment.
Protecting the surrounding is becoming an
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important
task as we have already
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started
facing issues
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because
of our activities. There is an argument that, efforts putting by the citizens won't be having any
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change
in the situation and
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only
the huge organization can do the task that actually protect the environment. I completely disagree with this as everyone's contributions
really
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help
the region to
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get
better.

Firstly
, the major environmental issue like global warming and air pollution is increasing
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because
of the burning of plastics. If each
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individual
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think
to ban the usage in their
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house
, then we can
easily
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
rid of spreading the poison gas into the atmosphere.
For instance
, in India, each apartment and
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individual
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houses
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stopped
the usage of plastic materials.
Moreover
, they
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started
using the proper disposal method to dispose the
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used
ones.
As a result
, there is a decrease in the level of air pollution in the area.

Secondly
, by giving awareness to our children in the school about the importance of planting the trees in the region and preserving the environment by reducing the contamination of the nature's product, we can protect our surroundings.
For example
, in Kerala, each student has planted a tree near to their
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house
as part of awareness
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class
and
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now
the village has shown a rise of 10% trees.
Additionally
, this
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helped
them to breath better.

On the other hand
, if the
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government
can
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help
the
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individual
by developing the techniques to segregate and disposal of waste without having a
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negative
impact to the nature then we can expedite the speed of the recovery of the nature.

In conclusion
, if each
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individual
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start
taking steps to protect their surroundings, then it can
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make
a
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big
difference in the climate and environment.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes
Learning another language is not only learning different words for the same things, but learning another way to think about things.
Flora Lewis

IELTS essay Agree or disagree? TPO 12 - It is better to have broad knowledge of many academic subjects than to specialize in one specific subject. v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
293 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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