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Advertising is all around us it is an unavoidable part of everyone's life some people say that advertising is a positive part of our life to what extent do you agree or disagree v.1

Advertising is all around us it is an unavoidable part of everyone's life some people say that advertising is a positive part of our life v. 1
Weather advertisement has positive and negative aspects or not has been the epicentre of discussion and a unanimous conclusive agreement is yet to be achieved. Different distinguished people have expressed their views on it through multiple modes of communication, be it the mainstream media or the social media. I endorse the statement half-heartedly, I have some solid grounds to defend my perceptions which I would like to supplicate it at length in the paragraphs to come. To begin with, it is an undeniable fact that nobody can escape from the power of advertisement nowadays either it is commercial and Online advertisement or the telly marketing meanwhile few advertisements provide a useful piece of information About the products or services which are available in the market. For instance, if someone is planning to go to book the holiday resort, but there is bewildering range of possible destination to choose then advertisement can help a customer to make the right choice which suit their pockets. To some cases, ergo, advertisement is a positive aspect of our lives. To some cases ergo advertisement is a positive aspect of our lives. On the contrary, however, some people consider that advertisement is largely unnecessary and intrusive. it is annoying because it is constantly surrounded by images and sounds of advertisement which disturbs our personal lives. Furthermore, the prime targets of advertisements our children and women they entice them and persuade them to buy that product. In addition to this, some advertisement organisations use techniques such as celebrity endorsement, in which they give a handsome amount of money to the eminent personalities to tempt the customers to buy the product which they do not even need and sometimes cannot afford to buy. Finally, people must be aware of advertisements which make false or exaggerated claims. In conclusion, although, Advertisements help us to buy things and save our time as well, but it has several negative aspects in our life in terms of stress and the creation of false dreams of fulfilment.
Weather
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advertisement
has
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positive
and
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negative
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aspects
or not has been the
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epicentre
of discussion and a unanimous conclusive agreement is
yet
to
be achieved
.
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Different
distinguished
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people
have expressed their views on it through multiple modes of communication, be it the mainstream media or the social media. I endorse the statement half-
heartedly
, I have
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some
solid grounds to defend my perceptions which I would like to supplicate it at length in the paragraphs to
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come
.

To
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begin
with, it is an undeniable fact that nobody can escape from the power of
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advertisement
nowadays either it is commercial and Online
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advertisement
or the
telly
marketing meanwhile few
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advertisements
provide a useful piece of information About the products or services which are available in the market.
For instance
, if someone is planning to go to book the holiday resort,
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but
there is bewildering range of possible destination to choose then
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advertisement
can
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help
a customer to
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make
the right choice which suit their pockets. To
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some
cases, ergo,
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advertisement
is a
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positive
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aspect
of our
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lives
. To
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some
cases ergo
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advertisement
is a
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positive
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aspect
of our
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lives
.

On the contrary
,
however
,
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some
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people
consider that
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advertisement
is
largely
unnecessary and intrusive.
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it
is annoying
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because
it is
constantly
surrounded by images and sounds of
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advertisement
which disturbs our personal
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lives
.
Furthermore
, the prime targets of
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advertisements
our children and women they entice them and persuade them to
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buy
that product.
In addition
to this,
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some
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advertisement
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organisations
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use
techniques such as celebrity endorsement, in which they give a handsome amount of money to the eminent personalities to tempt the customers to
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buy
the product which they do not even need and
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sometimes
cannot afford to
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buy
.
Finally
,
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people
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must
be aware of
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advertisements
which
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make
false or exaggerated claims.

In conclusion
, although,
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Advertisements
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help
us to
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buy
things and save our time
as well
,
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but
it has several
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negative
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aspects
in our life in terms of
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stress
and the creation of false dreams of
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fulfilment
.
10Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
21Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4Mistakes

IELTS essay Advertising is all around us it is an unavoidable part of everyone's life some people say that advertising is a positive part of our life v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
335 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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