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Advertising is all around us, it is an unavoidable part of everyone’s life. Some people say that advertising is a positive part of our lives while others say it is a negative one. Discuss both views and include your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. v.2

Advertising is all around us, it is an unavoidable part of everyone’s life. Some people say that advertising is a positive part of our lives while others say it is a negative one. v. 2
Many people wonder about advertisement. Some people think that it has negative impact in our life. However, others said it has been playing as positive effect on this world. This is not an easy essay to be answered, but I will look at this issue. Why advertisement has been playing a negative effect in our life? Of Course for several reasons: firstly, it motivates the psychological point in everyone, and women in particular. They will run to buy this advertised product especially if it’s from cosmetic roof, just to show their beauty to men, which may lead to negative effects of too much sexual attention. Secondly, you can sit comfortably with your family and suddenly the telephone is ringing, but it’s nothing important, it’s just another company try to convince you to buy one of their products. It is a real intrusive example of advertisement. Lastly, sometimes you do not have the financial ability to buy something, but with these new methods of advertisement, you will run to buy it, which will affect your budget. On the other hand, there are some good sides to advertising. For instance, it compares the prices of many companies which benefit the consumer. Besides, it really opens our vision to see more products which we do not knowit unless the TV or Radio advertised them. In addition to, it breaks our daily routine and allows us to see new faces and learn the language better with the help of the daily updates they deliver through advertisement. In conclusion, as we can see there are many aspects to this essay. I feel that we gain no benefits at all from advertisement, it plays on minds of people buy more things that they do not need it at all.
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impact in our life.
However
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positive
effect on this world. This is not an easy essay to
be answered
,
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but
I will look at this issue.

Why
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advertisement
has been playing a
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negative
effect in our life?
Of Course
for several reasons:
firstly
, it motivates the psychological point in everyone, and women
in particular
. They will run to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
buy
this advertised product
especially
if it’s from cosmetic roof,
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just
to
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show
their beauty to
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men
, which may lead to
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negative
effects of too much sexual attention.
Secondly
, you can sit
comfortably
with your family and
suddenly
the telephone is ringing,
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but
it’s nothing
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important
, it’s
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just
another
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company
try to convince you to
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buy
one of their products. It is a real intrusive example of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
advertisement
.
Lastly
,
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sometimes
you do not have the financial ability to
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buy
something,
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but
with these new methods of
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advertisement
, you will run to
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buy
it, which will affect your budget.

On the other hand
, there are
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some
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good
sides to advertising.
For instance
, it compares the prices of
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many
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companies
which benefit the consumer.
Besides
, it
really
opens our vision to
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see
more products which we do not
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knowit
unless the TV or Radio advertised them.
In addition
to, it breaks our daily routine and
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allows
us to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
see
new faces and learn the language better with the
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help
of the daily updates they deliver through advertisement.

In conclusion
, as we can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
see
there are
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
aspects to this essay. I feel that we gain no benefits at all from
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
advertisement
, it plays on minds of
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
buy
more things that they do not need it at all.
11Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
10Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes
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IELTS essay Advertising is all around us, it is an unavoidable part of everyone’s life. Some people say that advertising is a positive part of our lives while others say it is a negative one. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
293 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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