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Advertising is all around us. It is an unavoidable part of everyone’s life. Some people say that advertising is a positive part of our lives. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.3

Advertising is all around us. It is an unavoidable part of everyone’s life. Some people say that advertising is a positive part of our lives. v. 3
It is widely argued that advertising is the indispensable in life of each person. Some individuals assume that advertising brings countless benefits for them. Personally, although I strongly agree with this view, but I think that advertising also has certain drawback. In the one hand, advertising is considered as a positive part of lives based on major reasons. One reason is that customers would get to know more about products through advertising. As far as I know, currently, companies have plentiful marketing strategy in order to attract to users including televisions, websites or articles. Thanks to this circumstance, users could pay attention to product quality. Moreover, they could consider between this one and another to reinforce life quality. For instance, “Apple” and “Samsung” are the famous brand related to technology, but Apple is more flexible about tools or features. Hence, the rate of people using Apple after watching advertisement account for 80% in total in 2018. Another reason is that advertising creates a competitive environment. Actually, this is an integral thing promoting service quality from producers. They would accomplish this product carefully in order to make a great impression for users. For example, “Oppo” is a local brand engaged in technology as well in Vietnam. In the past, this brand used to be evaluated by clients due to bad quality. However, in 2017 this brand becomes more and more popular depending on developing quality. Therefore, advertising brings merits for users based on above reasons. In the other hand, I assume that advertising could bring drawback making worry for users. It can be seen from reality situations, advertising appear in everywhere densely, hence some firms overuse advertisement to make profits for themselves regardless of its quality, even this brings bad outcome for users. According to the newest report in 2018, 723 firms in the world went bankrupt since they lost customer belief. In conclusion, I agree definitely about positive aspect about advertising, but people should consider precisely before choosing.
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Some
individuals assume that advertising
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brings
countless benefits for them.
Personally
, although I
strongly
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agree
with this view,
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but
I
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think
that advertising
also
has certain drawback.

In the one hand, advertising
is considered
as a
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positive
part of
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lives
based on major reasons. One reason is that customers would
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
to know more about products through advertising. As far as I know,
currently
,
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companies
have plentiful marketing strategy in order to attract to
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users
including televisions, websites or articles. Thanks to this circumstance,
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users
could pay attention to product
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quality
.
Moreover
, they could consider between this one and another to reinforce life
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quality
.
For instance
, “Apple” and “Samsung” are the
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famous
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brand
related to technology,
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but
Apple is more flexible about tools or features.
Hence
, the rate of
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people
using Apple after watching advertisement account for 80% in total in 2018. Another reason is that advertising creates a competitive environment. Actually, this is an integral thing promoting service
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quality
from producers. They would accomplish this product
carefully
in order to
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make
a great impression for
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users
.
For example
, “
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Oppo
” is a local
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brand
engaged in technology
as well
in Vietnam. In the past, this
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brand
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
used
to
be evaluated
by clients due to
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bad
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quality
.
However
, in 2017 this
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brand
becomes more and more popular depending on developing
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quality
.
Therefore
, advertising
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brings
merits for
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users
based on above reasons.

In the other hand, I assume that advertising could
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bring
drawback making
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worry for
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users
. It can be
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seen
from reality situations, advertising appear in everywhere
densely
,
hence
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some
firms overuse advertisement to
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make
profits for themselves regardless of its
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quality
, even this
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brings
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bad
outcome for
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users
. According to the newest report in 2018, 723 firms in the world went bankrupt since they lost customer belief.

In conclusion
, I
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agree
definitely about
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positive
aspect about advertising,
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but
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people
should consider
precisely
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before
choosing.
12Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
20Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes

IELTS essay Advertising is all around us. It is an unavoidable part of everyone’s life. Some people say that advertising is a positive part of our lives. v. 3

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
328 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 6.5
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    Present relevant ideas
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