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Advertising can tell you a lot about a country. v.2

Advertising can tell you a lot about a country. v. 2
Advertising throughout the world is aimed to attract the targeted consumers or to promote the awareness of brands. Since the advertisement types and styles vary from country to country, it indeed exposes a lot about a country. That is why an advertisement aimed to target the Asian people would greatly vary from the one targeted for European citizens. A large investment and talented professionals are involved to produce different types of advertisement for television, radio, newspapers, banner or street ads. From these advertisements, someone can get an idea about the most famous products and services of a country. If anyone watches advertisements of a particular country in the television, s/he would be able to sense a lot of information about this country. The theme, ingredients and models used in today's ads greatly vary from country to country. While fast food neon-ads are pretty common in the United States, this can rarely be seen in a poor country. The costume, the makeup and even the models of an advertisement give many insights of a country. Nowadays, global brands like Samsung, Nokia and LG are making different types of ads for different countries and that's mainly because those countries have different people with different cultural behaviours and choices. While a swimsuit advertisement may be a very popular one in one country it might be completely forbidden for another country. While one country has numerous streets ads of alcohol or other drinks, they might be prohibited in another country. After judging all the above-mentioned logics and arguments, we can easily understand that from the advertisement we can learn a great deal of information about a country.
Advertising throughout the world
is aimed
to attract the targeted consumers or to promote the awareness of brands. Since the
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advertisement
types and styles vary from
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country
to
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country
, it
indeed
exposes a lot about a
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country
.
That is
why an
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advertisement
aimed to target the Asian
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people
would
greatly
vary from the one targeted for European citizens.

A large investment and talented professionals
are involved
to produce
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different
types of
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advertisement
for television, radio, newspapers, banner or street ads. From these
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advertisements
, someone can
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get
an
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idea
about the most
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famous
products and services of a
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country
. If anyone
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watches
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advertisements
of a particular
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country
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in the television
, s/he would be able to sense
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a lot of
information about this country.

The theme, ingredients and models
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used
in
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today
's ads
greatly
vary from
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country
to
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country
. While
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fast
food neon-ads are pretty common in the United States, this can rarely be
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seen
in a poor
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country
. The costume, the makeup and even the models of an
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advertisement
give
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many
insights of a
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country
. Nowadays, global brands like Samsung, Nokia and LG are making
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different
types of ads for
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different
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countries
and that's
mainly
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because
those
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countries
have
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different
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people
with
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different
cultural
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behaviours
and choices. While a swimsuit
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advertisement
may be a
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very
popular one in one
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country
it might be completely forbidden for another
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country
. While one
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country
has numerous streets ads of alcohol or other drinks, they might
be prohibited
in another country.

After judging all the above-mentioned logics and arguments, we can
easily
understand that from the
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advertisement
we can learn a great deal of information about a
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country
.
3Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
28Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes

IELTS essay Advertising can tell you a lot about a country. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
273 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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