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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The content of advertising in a particular country can tell you a lot about that country. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. v.667

The content of advertising in a particular country can tell you a lot about that country. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. v. 667
Advertisement is one of the basements of companies to sell their product, however advertisement is different according to the country. In my opinion, advertisement is another tool to gain information about the country who is broadcasting it. First, advertising is a marketing technic for companies to promote their products which answer to a society’s need. Indeed, companies create a product or a service in order to satisfy consumers ‘need or willing otherwise the product would not be sold. According to the country, advertisement will be more or less develop: for example, the advertisement can be broadcast through newspaper or technological device and therefore indicates the level of development of the country. Consequently, advertisement reflects the economic situation of a country. Moreover, advertising highlights customs of country. For example, United states are an important consumer of Coca-Cola or Mc Donald’s, which reflects the habits of consumption of the population and explains why there are so many diabetic people in this country. When people are travelling abroad and they turn on TV, they can watch advertisement of a company that is also advertising in their own country. Nevertheless, the advertisement would not be the same in this foreign country because the company will have made a market study and a social survey to broadcast an advertisement that sticks to the country’s custom and behaviors. Finally, advertisement underlines the social behaviors about a country. Indeed, advertisement development of social applications to find love which has modified the way people interact with each other shows the new social habits of a society. If people see this kind of advertisement in the street, they will know that these applications are part of the society and they will adapt their behaviors by applying a new norm. To conclude, advertisement can afford knowledge about society’s need, economic situation of a country as well as customs and social habits of the country which is broadcasting this advertisement.
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is one of the basements of
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companies
to sell their
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product
,
however
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advertisement
is
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different
according to the
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country
. In my opinion,
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advertisement
is another tool to gain information about the
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country
who is broadcasting it.

First
, advertising is a marketing
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technic
for
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companies
to promote their
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products
which answer to a
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society’s
need.
Indeed
,
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companies
create a
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product
or a service in order to satisfy consumers ‘need or willing
otherwise
the
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product
would not
be sold
.

According to the
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country
,
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advertisement
will be more or less develop:
for example
, the
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advertisement
can be broadcast through newspaper or technological device and
therefore
indicates the level of development of the
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country
.
Consequently
,
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advertisement
reflects the economic situation of a country.

Moreover
, advertising highlights customs of
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country
.
For example
,
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United states
are an
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important
consumer of Coca-Cola or
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Mc
Donald’s, which reflects the habits of consumption of the population and
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explains
why there are
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so
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many
diabetic
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people
in this
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country
. When
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people
are travelling
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abroad and
they turn on TV, they can
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watch
The usual collocation for "advertisement" is "for" not "of". Did you mean "advertisement for"?
advertisement of
a
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company
that is
also
advertising in their
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own
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country
.
Nevertheless
, the
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advertisement
would not be the same in this foreign
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country
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because
the
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company
will have made a market study and a
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social
survey to broadcast an
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advertisement
that sticks to the
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country’s
custom and behaviors.

Finally
,
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advertisement
underlines the
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social
behaviors about a
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country
.
Indeed
,
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advertisement
development of
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social
applications to find
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love
which has modified the way
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people
interact with each other
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shows
the new
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social
habits of a
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society
. If
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people
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see
this kind of
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advertisement
in the street, they will know that these applications are part of the
Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
society and
they will adapt their behaviors by applying a new norm.

To conclude
,
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advertisement
can afford knowledge about
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society’s
need, economic situation of a
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country
as well
as customs and
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social
habits of the
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country
which is broadcasting this
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advertisement
.
18Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
48Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
6Mistakes

IELTS essay The content of advertising in a particular country can tell you a lot about that country. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. v. 667

Essay
  American English
6 paragraphs
319 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 5.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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