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According to some, we learn most of our lessons from our parents and hence they are our best teachers in life. While others argue that the teachers we meet in our schools and colleges teach us more important things. v.1

According to some, we learn most of our lessons from our parents and hence they are our best teachers in life. While others argue that the teachers we meet in our schools and colleges teach us more important things. v. 1
Parents play an important role for every kid and it is believed by some people that parents are good teachers. Whereas others convey that teachers and elders are best mentors. However, I believe that at initial stage parents are ever best teachers for following reasons. On top of this statement, both father and mother are the best teachers from childhood till teenage. In most of the cases, this teaching and learning extend to old age. Subsequently, no matter how old children grow, they are still loved by the parents. Dad and mum nourish their kids towards good attitudes, education, discipline and social responsibility so that they become role models for their nation. Moreover, children are the future architect of a prosperous country. Both father and mother are key players in the etiquette of good and bad qualities to their beloved ones. They should guide how to respect elders, relatives and friends etc. with this they must lay an excellent foundation in perspective of education. On other hand, parents should not forcibly apply their ideas and a thought on children to choose their career option to prosper in the area of interest freedom is important fact here. Both dad and mum should mentor and support morally in terms of finance and other aspects which are mandatory to loved ones. Meanwhile, children should not take advantage of love and affection and must be trustworthy to their parents and should not cheat. Children are responsible for fulfilling parent’s dreams. Finally, my conclusion on above statement is parents are good path creators of their children. It depends upon relationship and understanding of both.
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. Whereas others convey that
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teachers
and elders are best mentors.
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, I believe that at initial stage
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parents
are ever best
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teachers
for following reasons.

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teachers
from childhood till teenage. In most of the cases, this teaching and learning
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age.
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, no matter how
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old
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children
grow, they are
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loved
by the
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parents
. Dad and mum nourish their kids towards
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good
attitudes, education, discipline and social responsibility
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so
that they become role models for their nation.
Moreover
,
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children
are the future architect of a prosperous country. Both father and mother are key players in the etiquette of
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good
and
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qualities to their beloved
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ones
. They should guide how to respect elders, relatives and friends etc. with this they
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must
lay an excellent foundation in perspective of education.

On other hand,
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parents
should not
forcibly
apply their
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ideas
and a
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children
to choose their career option to prosper in the area of interest freedom is
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important
fact here. Both dad and mum should mentor and support
morally
in terms of finance and other aspects which are mandatory to
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loved
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ones
. Meanwhile,
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children
should not take advantage of
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love
and affection and
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must
be trustworthy to their
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parents
and should not cheat.
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Children
are responsible for fulfilling
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parent’s
dreams.

Finally
, my conclusion on above statement is
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parents
are
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good
path creators of their
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children
. It depends upon relationship and understanding of both.
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24Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay According to some, we learn most of our lessons from our parents and hence they are our best teachers in life. While others argue that the teachers we meet in our schools and colleges teach us more important things. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
269 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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