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Though women mostly take care of their children in most of the societies, men can also be as good as women in upbringing children. The parenting responsibilities should be equally divided and both father and mother should take care of their children. v.2

Though women mostly take care of their children in most of the societies, men can also be as good as women in upbringing children. The parenting responsibilities should be equally divided and both father and mother should take care of their children. v. 2
Parenting is an art which is mastered by a woman more than a man. A woman is more patient and understanding than a man and so I agree with the opinion that women make good parents than men but I completely disagree with the fact that, the responsibility lies more with the woman in taking care of a child. In my point of view men and woman share equal rights and responsibilities when it comes to parenting. Woman are better parents than men as they understand their children better than anybody else can because a child spends a major portion of his childhood with his mother and so the mother has a perception on his needs and requirements. A father though holds equal rights and responsibilities to his child as much as a mother, a father doesn't get enough time to spend with his child. Hence a father wouldn't be able to control his child and make him understand things as much as what a mother could do. It's a scientifically proven fact that a woman upon becoming a mother undergoes huge mental and physical changes. A woman becomes more tolerant patient understanding loving. And this perfectly shapes herself up for parenting and a child who has grown up with his mother respect other women in comparison to children who hasn't. Though it's a proven point that women make better parents than men the roles and responsibilities of a child are or should be equally shared by both men and woman. Men often mistakenly consider their responsibilities over their child.
Parenting is an art which
is mastered
by a
woman
more than a
man
. A
woman
is more patient and understanding than a
man and
so
I
agree
with the opinion that women
make
good
parents than
men
but
I completely
disagree with the fact that
, the
responsibility
lies more with the
woman
in taking care of a child.

In my point of view
men
and
woman
share equal rights and
responsibilities
when it
comes
to parenting.
Woman
are better parents than
men
as they understand their children better than anybody else can
because
a
child
spends a major portion of his childhood with his
mother
and
so
the
mother
has a perception on his needs and requirements.

A father though holds equal rights and
responsibilities
to his
child
as much as a
mother
, a father doesn't
get
enough
time to spend with his
child
.
Hence
a father wouldn't be able to control his
child
and
make
him understand things as much as what a
mother
could do. It's a
scientifically
proven fact that a
woman
upon becoming a
mother
undergoes huge mental and physical
changes
. A
woman
becomes more tolerant patient understanding loving. And this
perfectly
shapes herself up for parenting and a
child
who has grown up with his
mother
respect other women
in comparison
to children who
hasn
't.

Though it's a proven point that women
make
better parents than
men
the roles and
responsibilities
of a
child
are or should be
equally
shared by both
men
and
woman
.
Men
often
mistakenly
consider their
responsibilities
over their
child
.
3Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
32Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4Mistakes

IELTS essay Though women mostly take care of their children in most of the societies, men can also be as good as women in upbringing children. The parenting responsibilities should be equally divided and both father and mother should take care of their children. v. 2

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  American English
4 paragraphs
260 words
5.5
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