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A possession is an object that you own. If you are asked to choose one possession that you prize highly which one would you choose? Why? What makes this possession specially valuable to you? Use specific reasons and details to explain your choice. v.1

A possession is an object that you own. If you are asked to choose one possession that you prize highly which one would you choose? Why? What makes this possession specially valuable to you? Use specific reasons and details to explain your choice. v. 1
Nowadays, it is obvious that the congestion in nearly all over the world is on the increase and cities are becoming busier. In my opinion, this problem must be tackled because it is a global issue and most of people, especially who live in big cities, are suffering from that. One of the main reasons which causes the traffic jam is that the majority of people prefer using their own cars instead of public transportation. However, it is not impossible to find good and effective ways to control the congestion. Public transportation is the easiest way to solve this trouble. If there are comfortable and cheap public transportations such as trains and buses, they will make people like to use them better than drive. For instance, in Manchester, Stagecoach buses are the most convenient buses that help the city to have comfortable life in its roads and streets during rush hours. In fact, governments should provide much better public transportation and charge prices that are affordable for everyone. Another solution to solve that is to charge the congestion fee for every car that will go into a city centre. It will either discourage people from driving into that area, or raise more money for public transportation. A good example of this situation is London, which now has a congestion charge. Going to the city centre in London costs about £8 per day. In conclusion, the problem of traffic congestion can be tackled by improving public transportation and by charging drivers who enter city centres.
Nowadays, it is obvious that the
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congestion
in
nearly
all over the world is on the increase and
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cities
are becoming busier. In my opinion, this problem
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must
be tackled
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because
it is a global issue and most of
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people
,
especially
who
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live
in
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big
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cities
, are suffering from that.

One of the main reasons which causes the traffic jam is that the majority of
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people
prefer using their
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own
cars
instead
of
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public
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transportation
.
However
, it is not impossible to find
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good
and effective ways to control the
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congestion
.
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Public
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transportation
is the easiest way to solve this trouble. If there are comfortable and
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cheap
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public
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transportations
such as trains and buses, they will
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make
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people
like to
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use
them better than drive.
For instance
, in Manchester, Stagecoach buses are the most convenient buses that
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help
the city to have comfortable life in its roads and streets during rush hours. In fact,
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governments
should provide much better
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public
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transportation
and charge prices that are affordable for everyone.

Another solution to solve
that is
to charge the
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congestion
fee for every car that will go into a city
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centre
. It will either discourage
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people
from driving into that area, or raise more money for
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public
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transportation
. A
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good
example of this situation is London, which
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now
has a
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congestion
charge. Going to the city
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centre
in London costs about £8 per day.

In conclusion
, the problem of traffic
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congestion
can
be tackled
by improving
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public
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transportation
and by charging drivers who enter city
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centres
.
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IELTS essay A possession is an object that you own. If you are asked to choose one possession that you prize highly which one would you choose? Why? What makes this possession specially valuable to you? Use specific reasons and details to explain your choice. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
254 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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